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++ Crimson Artist ++


Alone
It's only me
With this razor in my hand
As I cut the pain away

Crimson
It runs down my trembling arm
As my wounds scream
Burning my aching ears

Tears
They drop lazily down to the floor
As I gaze at my wrist
The torn skin reflecting my rage

Weakness
I look at the marks on my skin
A beautiful scene painted in red
As I am dubbed the artist

Sadness
As I think about them
More tears fall,
As I realize I will stay like this
I will always give in to the blade

Author notes

Ok I really don't know about this. I was going for a different style of writing. Well just tell me what you think and be brutal!
Written July 10th, 2006

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  • OctoberCrush
    August 9, 2006
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    Heeey...good poem...deep poem...I like poem...good write hun! <3333 Jerica


  • xXbroken lullabyXx
    July 31, 2006
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    i like this..and i really know how that feels..giving into the blade and knowing that i'm weak for doing it..but great write i really enjoyed it


  • Silent suffering 67
    July 23, 2006
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    kl well done

    beautiful and understandable im speechless this is a beautiful piece well done

  • sinfullone
    July 21, 2006
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    soul stirring

    Wow I can totally relate but I hope you are ok..phinaminal wrighting keep it up


  • Miss Miranda
    July 12, 2006
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    Wonderful

    I think this was quite beautiful. I could relate to it since I used to cut. I think that you described the feelings and the emotions associated with it extremely well.
    ♥
    ShreddedxGrace

  • BreakingxThexHabit
    July 11, 2006
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    Lol thanks Jess for the wonderful comment as usual. Don't worry about them being late. Well thanks again for commenting!

    Much love,

    Muah


  • Of the FreakVariety
    July 11, 2006
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    And here I am now. Late. As usual -.-' I'm trying to get back on track, really I am!
    So anyway >.< I like this. I liked how you started off each stanza with one word and then played the rest of the lines off of that word. Pretty cool I thought. And just something about it overall..the feeling I guess, but I liked that something. So yeah, great job ^.^ I feel that this deserves an applause ^.^
    xxJessie

  • KissMeImContagiousx
    July 11, 2006
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    Beautiful

    This is a beautiful poem! I can really relate to this! This was a very deep and powerful piece! Great job and keep it up!

    Love, Cassie


  • 8 blacklights
    July 10, 2006
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    this is really well written, the words paint a picture in my mind and its morbidly beautiful

    -Steph

  • FedUpWitU80
    July 10, 2006
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    ummm.I don't know what to say...hey at least I commented!
    me

  • xXxSilentCryxXx
    July 10, 2006
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    I really liked this. I liked the kinda title thing for each stanza. 'Crimson-Tears-Weakness-Sadness'
    Really powerful.
    Well doooone
    xxxxx

  • Becki Jayne
    July 10, 2006
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    It's really good , really well written..I can relate and i'm sure many other people will be able to, keep writing

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