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Empty And Alone, And Yet I Feel Her

Inside my head
The swirling darkness all around
I see her, I feel her
Things happen for a reason, I guess
Yet still...
I see her, I feel her

I'm empty, I'm scared
I fear there is nothing left inside
And there she is, still
Inside my head
I see her, I feel her

Is she really gone?
Could it really be true?
Why must I still see her?
Still feel her?
If it is her who left me empty
Who left me alone?

Always she will be a part of me
My childish fears hold me
That no matter what I will not let go
That no matter what this will hurt
As badly then as it does now

As my bedfellow of pain returns
She is there next to him
She is the one who called him back to me
My darling Melody
My beautiful, sweet darling Melody

Why must I not forget?
Why can I not let go?
'With time' they say
But I do not want it
I never want to let her go

Her presence is all around me
In everything I see
In everything I hear
She is there
I cannot escape her

I still see her
I still feel her
Deep inside of me
I wish she was still there
My darling Melody

Author notes

She is gone now.  Never shall I have her again...
Written July 10th, 2006

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  • think of me x
    July 10, 2006
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    I really love this poem. The flow was good, it was simple to understand and yet very deep. I understand how you feel, almost exactly. Maybe not exactly because I do not know the circumstances, but they say with time comes healing. i don't think it's true. I don't think time will heal our wounds. It merely covers them up so the sights don't scare us away from new opportunities.


  • TheDragonsVengeance
    July 10, 2006
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    Thank you very much for your comments. Yes, it is an extremly trying time right now, and a very personal write, be we have to get it out somehow, no?


  • Dancing Marionette
    July 10, 2006
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    "Why must I not forget?
    Why can I not let go?
    'With time' they say
    But I do not want it
    I never want to let her go"

    That stanza just took my breath away, this poem was just SO well written and deep, you can tell that it was a very personal write. Seriously, great job on writting this.

    Nickole


  • damnitjade
    July 10, 2006
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    strange, and sweet. not choppy at all. loved it.

  • TheDragonsVengeance
    July 10, 2006
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    Thank you. I appreciate you taking the time to comment on my poetry. This one was a very difficult write for me.


  • ILUVuBUTuDONTluvME
    July 10, 2006
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    THAT WAS VERY SWEET. i loved how u repeated some things in there. i loved it. it was beautiful!!!!! i would applaud it, but i dont have enough points!!!

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