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Reflections~

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Reflections~
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I've searched in-depth, where dreamers do travel

And found so many, who sustain fluent fears

Though I sew gently, still weavings unravel

Tracing liquid eyes trickling, dirty~white~tears

 

 

I open my torn heart, where visions seep through

Into broken neglected, whispering pleas

As my tears drip icy, ink indigo blue

Love's beacon of insight, still shines down on me

 

 

Diverse stormy skies, voices loud as thunder

Where rock firm foundations, crumble in dismay

Toxic lips lie, pulling the strongest under

Inflicting nightmarish memories fog gray

 

 

Contemplating moments, vast puddles breach floors

Though tides tiptoe, upon thick, golden honey

Restoring hopeless faith, wings split by the cores

Where fables unfold, death becomes harmony

 

 

The screams of my spirit, dissolve in thin air

With my words, mere footprints, a view in wet sand

Though if I step slowly, each heavenly stair

I may sow seeds on fertile promised land

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(silver) Thanks for reading me, much love, Timothy~
Written July 10th, 2006

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  • Inspyred
    March 24, 2008
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    again wow

    i love reading ur poems so emotional so thought filled ur absolutly amazing


  • oldphotosonlybringt
    February 20, 2008

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    And found so many, who sustain fluent fears

    Though I sew gently, still weavings unravel


    Toxic lips lie, pulling the strongest under

    Inflicting nightmarish memories fog gray

    great poem dad, i loved it very much these lines really stuck out to me, with all my love,,xoxox


  • Rachael70
    October 18, 2006
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    WONDERFUL!!!!

    WOW, this is a great poem.
    You really do have alot of telent.
    You always seem to put so much feeling into your writing.
    And that makes your writes so enjoiable to read.
    GREAT PIECE !!!


  • koaru kamiya
    July 22, 2006
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    nice

    i love it keep up the good work

  • MusicalMe
    July 22, 2006
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    Fantastic imagery and good job with the rhyming. It's so beautiful, but sad. It's so touching and something many can identify with.


  • Whispering Winds
    July 21, 2006
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    Timothy, this is a very beautiful write.
    I really love this, it kinda fits the way my life is right now

    loves ya
    Tammy


  • finding faith
    July 20, 2006
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    you most deffinatly "wove" this poem beautifully, it is a great poem and is an impressive show of fluid vocabulary!! this is great work and i will enjoy reading more of your work also
    ~faith

  • Sasuke Uchiha
    July 19, 2006
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    this really touches my soul.


  • Sonrio
    July 18, 2006
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    It takes a lot in a poem to make me cry. This did it. I feel like it is something that I've wanted to say for so long...you put it into beautiful words for me...so beautiful that it made me cry. I know you've got a lot of applauds, but I've gotta give you another one...this is gorgeous. ~Kiwi
    P.S. Cool picture


  • ShakespearesLady
    July 18, 2006
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    beautiful totally beautiful


  • Goody two shoes
    July 17, 2006
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    Loved it

    Very Good. It's good enough to hold one all the way through.
    Loved it.
    Goody Two Shoes


  • -JuLz-
    July 17, 2006
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    GREAT

    WOW
    I loved this, its so beautiful, my favourite part was the last stanza; oarticularly 'The screams of my spirit'. I just think this was breath-taking. Well done, i will def b reading more!!!!
    Julz x


  • astralshepherd gold member
    July 17, 2006
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    a perfectly created, wonderfully crafted and brilliantly presented poem. Excellent flow and joy to read your reflections. Blessings and best wishes, ~richard

  • xsuicidaldemonx
    July 17, 2006
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    Breath Taking

    An exelent write, I loved it very much.
    Such beautiful words, flow like rivers.
    Keep up the great work.

  • darrylblacksr
    July 17, 2006
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    beautifully written poem

    This is so beautifully written that I know I will read it again and again..... Thank you for sharing it with me...


  • grannyeri gold member
    July 17, 2006
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    Congratulations on winning silver with this lovely write. Very nice presentation and grapic as well - good flow, rhythm and rhyme throughout. Easy to read and understand.


  • DarknessFleeting
    July 17, 2006
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    That was beautifully written and had a natural feeling to it as it progressed, as if every line simply flowed forth from your soul. The word choice and placement was wonderful, and the imagery was great as well. My favorite lines were:

    "Toxic lips lie, pulling the strongest under
    Inflicting nightmarish memories fog gray"

    keep spinning out these wonderful works.

  • Jeremy Kyle Klub
    July 17, 2006
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    Ohm ygod what a lot of applause. Well, it's deserved I guess. Great poem, but after all that, I guess you don't really need to hear that do you?
    Snuggly x

  • Betty Rickard
    July 17, 2006
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    Excellent

    Absolutely an excellent write. Written so well..Heartfelt and emotional..Excellent!
    Blessings,
    Betty


  • starwing
    July 17, 2006
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    this was absolutely gorgeous...dark and hopeful at the same time...wonderful word usage... very impressive... ...shzoosy


  • LadyUnique silver member
    July 17, 2006
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    oh this is lovely
    beyond that really and i guess i'm a bit speechless so i shall just applaud the poet and the poem


  • July 17, 2006
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    great

    Great piece..my favorite lines/stanza's were:

    "Diverse stormy skies, voices loud as thunder
    Where rock firm foundations, crumble in dismay
    Toxic lips lie, pulling the strongest under
    Inflicting nightmarish memories fog gray"

    and...


    "The screams of my spirit, dissolve in thin air
    With my words, mere footprints, a view in wet sand
    Though if I step slowly, each heavenly stair
    I may sow seeds on fertile promised land"

    These stanzas really captured me out of all of them. I loved this piece. Very interesting. I enjoyed reading it..Keep it up.

    Courtney
    <3





  • Imperfect Beauty
    July 17, 2006
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    this is really nice. you have expressed the emotion well! thnaks for sharing! LJMYERS

  • ryanfielding
    July 16, 2006
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    awesome just like painting with words, you gave life to everything. definately a poem to read again and again

  • HeavenTeardrop
    July 16, 2006
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    I've read this poem about 20 times and every time it just blows my mind! You did a tremendous job, everything flows like water off the tip of my tongue. This has to be one of the best if not the best poem I've ever read.

    -Ray-


  • MissyAnn
    July 15, 2006
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    WAY good!!! :)

    this poem is soooo good! wowy! this is sooooo good the flow and structure is great!....you painted those words beautifully!the style the everything is great! :-O


  • innocence jaded.xx
    July 15, 2006
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    HOLY CRAP THIS IS JUST WOW! really, really good poem! the picture was awesome too! good work on this!

  • Poetic Fanatic
    July 15, 2006
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    Congratulations Timbro!

    Oh and congratulations on your silver cup. How could one do better to get gold? I don't know but I aim to find out! lol
    I'm off to see what possibly did win higher honors than this.

    Tommy

  • Poetic Fanatic
    July 15, 2006
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    Tim,
    I thought I saw this before, the title was very familiar. Upon further examination, I guess I did miss this. This poem, no doubt is a masterful art of presentation. The picture is a nice enhancement and your poem, this poem is loaded with passion! If I did not know better, these things could be said by our Lord who awaits an invitation to His abode in our hearts. Of course a second interpretation might be that this person is an unwelcomed stranger who brings good tidings. Maybe it's both but
    allow me to applaud your just deserved efforts. This is a wonderful poem Tim, I guess you really stress yourself to do only your best. That is a key to success and that beats being prolific anytime. I might be jealous. lol Carry on and keep your words going strong.

    Tommy


  • Lonly Dragon
    July 15, 2006
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    wow. that took my breath away. i could almost see the hope and chaos. well i think it was awsome!


  • bryansgirl04
    July 15, 2006
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    very well written. i enjoyed reading your poem. your a very nice writter.


  • sustaind
    July 14, 2006
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    simply awesome!


  • Goody two shoes
    July 14, 2006
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    Love it

    Really like it. Rhyme is excellent. Keep it up.
    From Goody Two Shoes


  • TangibleTattoos
    July 13, 2006
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    WOWWWWW!!!! I love it! its terrific!
    -MG-


  • -Fallen Angel-
    July 13, 2006
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    amazing

    I thought this poem was excellent.It's written so well and it has so many images it's like a painting!Its so meaningful and so beautiful!Great job!!

  • Bella-Malta
    July 13, 2006
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    Very little I can add to what have been already said. It is awsome! well done!


  • Frozen.Fracture
    July 13, 2006
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    This poem is beautiful. It's written so well and it has so many images it's like a painting!


  • nichtmich silver member
    July 13, 2006
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    Exquisite

    This poem is a wonderful journey of rich imagery and breathtaking words that fill the heart and soul of the reader. Dark and heartbreaking, but ending with an uplifting promise of hope. My favorite line is "Though I sew gently, weavings unravel." That is our fate sometimes, to watch our dreams dissolve even as we strive to make them come true.
    No critique here. Don't change a single thing.


  • lovelauren2177
    July 13, 2006
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    Wonderfully written. You took my breath away too. Not surprising though. Your words are so touching and show you have great meaning to what you wrote. Every line is filled with pictures. You gave so clear descriptions so you could picture it and have the emotion you had when writing it. A mystery is where this took my, very magical. Good flow and rythm.Great Job!


  • July 13, 2006
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    Magical

    so beautifully written! every line filled with images and emotion, taking the reader on a mystical journey of the mind. Great pace and flow Well done!


  • teardrop gold member
    July 13, 2006
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    Wow!!! Take my breath away!! Timothy, you always touch me with your words. They are alway so meaningful and so beautiful!

    Rene'


  • VirginiaDarling
    July 13, 2006
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    Profound and thought provoking

    What really stuck out to me was this stana:

    'Contemplating moments, vast puddles breach floors
    Though tides tiptoe, upon thick, golden honey
    Restoring hopeless faith, wings split by the cores
    Where fables unfold, death becomes harmony'

    I guess cause sometimes this is how I feel whenever I am feeling down and sad. Good write never the less.

    Sophisticated V


  • Sidra Sabella
    July 13, 2006
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    amazing

    wow this line blew me away.
    "I open my torn heart, where visions seep through
    Into broken neglected, whispering pleas
    As my tears drip icy, ink indigo blue
    Love's beacon of insight, still shines down on me"

    but in truth your whole peice is mind-numbing!my god your good. ive never been this moved before and there is nothing i can say to capture the greatness in this peom.its truly breathetaking

  • Hokuikai
    July 13, 2006
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    A beautiful poem with imagery so great because of the words you used and the order everything was in. It was a somewhat sad yet ending in relief and hope kind of feeling and it was nice.

  • Angel Voice
    July 13, 2006
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    I thought this poem was excellent the way it flowed and how it was so easy to read. Eerything went together so smoothly. I love the descriptive words that you chose to use in this poem...it not only helped to make the poem more descriptive but it helped to make the poem so much more enjoying to read. awesome write keep it up.

    <3 Lace


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    July 13, 2006
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    Sweet brother Timothy,
    I know I've read this one before but I had to come back and read it yet again! Your heart speaks deep, true meaning and please know that should EVER you need ANYTHING for ANY reason, I am here for you!
    You're such a kind, caring, and giving soul and I love you dearly, my brother!
    Much love and many hugs to you!
    Sandy


  • Lord voldemort
    July 13, 2006
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    this was an absorbing write ..your choice of words was simply wonderfull and you have the quality to shape your words in any way you like ..taking the reader along with your ..rythem was quite nice and flow was very smooth well done and keep it up i am going to read some more of your poems


  • Secret keeper
    July 13, 2006
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    this poem was just outstanding!! it was wounderful how you put it all together!! it was so deep and touching!! it was an awsome write!!! i can not wait until your next piece!

    -brandon-

  • The Pole Star
    July 12, 2006
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    oh! I did never read something so touching and deep. anyways, did you try to have allitration in the poem? I did see some glimpse Keep writing s


  • poeticweaver gold member
    July 12, 2006
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    Thanks so much for your kind words, they mean so much in such an uncaring world at time, they can go so far..and I appreciate ya!

    -Timothy


  • Sabindi
    July 12, 2006
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    Outstanding

    What an incredibly outstanding poem. So magnificiently penned with vivid imagary, incredibly creative and stunning in every way imaginable. I think this deserved a gold for sure!!! Love Marilyn


  • angel-lover
    July 12, 2006
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    excellent

    Hello Timothy this is a wonderful piece and love the picture it's perfect for your write.A brilliant creative poem well done. thank-you for sharing your work.
    be well from Tracey


  • neoladyem
    July 12, 2006
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    This is one groovy poem you have written here. All the words were descripition and creatived used in a grand way. You have a gifted touch with words. I also love the tear drop picture you put with this piece. It even gives a even more bewitching feeling to the whole poem.


  • PaintedParisPassion
    July 12, 2006
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    Captivating

    I have been wanting to read this poem for the longest time, and i finally have, and im so glad i have gotten the priviledge to actually read it, and i know why its the #1 most view poem for the week here on AP, its brilliant, well actually i dont know if brilliant does justice for it, but it has left me speechless in a way, you're a very talented writer!!! Keep writing, and keep sharing!



    SW


  • poeticweaver gold member
    July 12, 2006
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    Thanks!

    Thanks for reading me,
    I appreciate your time,
    and I'm glad you liked what I penned here!

    Peace, Timothy


  • July 12, 2006
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    Wow!!
    such intensity of emotions
    written with such care this poem
    is just magical to read and a
    a stunning write!!!
    lynn
    p.s. congratulations on the silver trophy!!!


  • Peaceloveandbeatles
    July 12, 2006
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    Wow this is amazing daddy!


  • Trellis
    July 12, 2006
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    Well constructed and rhymed. I had difficulty really getting my arms around it because it is so sad - but there is no question that you've done an excellent job on this piece. I'm just not into "sad" right now.

    Congrats on your win! Well deserved!

    Cris
    Edited on Jul 12, 6:46 p.m. because ''.


  • gymgirl426
    July 12, 2006
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    AWESOME

    oh my gosh! This is such a remarkable poem. you have such talent and you have such vivid words that really bring the poem to life! keep writing!


  • stephiega
    July 12, 2006
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    Imagery,imagery,imagery and lot's of it.Loved it and it is great work.


  • Mad Moon silver member
    July 12, 2006
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    Timothy, this is breathtakingly beautiful despite the sadness it contains. Surely penned from the ink drawn from an aching soul. All the wonderful alliteration in this makes it flow ever so smoothly. Love the subtle rhyme scheme, as well. You are such a master at this, ya know! Though it's full of sorrow, it doesn't swallow you up in it. Each line drips with pefectly penned pain. I can so relate to this, dear brother, only too well. Such well chosen words, and sharp imagery create such wonderful pictures in the mind, even with the doleful content. Brilliantly penned, Timothy! I adore it, and you! I wish you happiness, dear one, and all the love and laughter you can stand. Bravo! Love ya!!
    Edited on Jul 12, 2:18 p.m. because 'because 'of yet another attack of that wretched dislexic finger ! '.


  • raggyann
    July 11, 2006
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    this a beautiful poem
    great words
    just great everything
    i love this poem
    thank you


  • poeticweaver gold member
    July 11, 2006
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    Thanks!

    Thanks for placing me in this contest, I appreciate you and your inspiration! Peace!

    -Timothy


  • July 11, 2006
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    thats awsome


  • Hearts-Break
    July 11, 2006
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    Hellooo!
    Well done!
    Silver trophie
    I absolutely love your work, such passion, thought, and the imagery used, is so powerful.
    Beautiful work.

    Ashxxx<3

  • kimmiebkirk
    July 11, 2006
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    Very vividly written. I enjoyed reading this very much.


  • WisdomWarrior
    July 11, 2006
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    Wonderful imagery!


  • Loveandblessings2u gold member
    July 10, 2006
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    wow OMG........ this has got to be the most beautiful poem i have ever read.
    this is just remarkable
    so amazing and touching.
    a truly wonderful write. excellent, outstanding.
    i just love this write so much,
    and the picture itself is beautiful.
    great job... joyce


  • Sunkissedrose
    July 10, 2006
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    beautiful imagery

    This was definetly one of my favorite pieces done by you. The two lines that spoke to me because the imagery was so strong...

    Tracing liquid eyes trickling, dirty~white~tears
    and
    As my tears drip icy, ink indigo blue

    sent chills down my spine. I love how the ending of this shows your spirit shining through. The hope and love you portray for all those you meet it's amazing.

    Much love,
    Carrie


  • luckynsincere
    July 10, 2006
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    Another master piece by you I always love reading you!!! Thanks for sharing the beauty of your pen with all of us here...


    I adore your work!

    Mel


  • eccentrikchild
    July 10, 2006
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    Great job!

    this is a great poem! I'm speechless. I like how it talk about how she's sad and the stuff you write about are personal. It really shows that you're a really nice person!


  • Toadluvinlady
    July 10, 2006
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    Great work, Keep it up!!!


  • Lady Altheia
    July 10, 2006
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    I felt such emotion in this poem. I ti a work of poetic beauty. You painted the reflections ouf your soul and brought it out.


  • esroddo silver member
    July 10, 2006
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    breath taking

    i was spell bound really i enjoyed it the more i read the more it interested me. i like work like this and your illutration was wonderful


  • drama-queen12547
    July 10, 2006
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    That was fantastic...I don't know wat more to say...just...it was fantastic

  • pozo
    July 10, 2006
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    The ending of this poem seemed quite hopeful Nice use of sibilance and alliteration here Good imagery, this was quite dark and sad. I like the rhyme that you used here Keep writing, this was a very deep poem with good flow
    All the best
    Pozo


  • LeftAccount
    July 10, 2006
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    Wow, This poem is truly beautiful. Everything from the word choice to the flow is stunning. Your poem has such an ethereal, almost forlorn feel to it yet expressed by riveting words full of emotion and once again, beauty.

    Amazing work,
    Keep writing,
    ~AutumnButterfly
    Edited on Jul 10, 2:42 p.m. because ''.


  • NuraSkye
    July 10, 2006
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    ^^

    This is a well writen poem. I think its amazing. Hope you keep up good work like this. Its great.


  • July 10, 2006
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    nice job

    this poem is very well writen, it has so much emotion. its a beautiful poem. i love it. kepp up the good work. i hope to read more of your poetry in the future,ttyl
    †fallnangel†


  • The Crapaud
    July 10, 2006
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    A beautiful piece that drew many pictures from my heart and rekindled the ember of hope. Thank you.


    Blessings


  • Gentle Chaos Lion
    July 10, 2006
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    Stepping on surface seeds buries them for growth. Tears can water them if not too salty. A gentle blue will do before harmony's death. Good luck with the contest.


  • ShatterglassSecret
    July 10, 2006
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    this is beautiful. your fluency and your language choice are indescribable!


  • Shh-Sues-Writing
    July 10, 2006
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    this is so wonderfully written.... as i was reading, i was imagining my soul as you described.... outstanding emotions in this one! it's rare for me to parallel a poem with my life, but yours here works perfectly for the way that i've been feeling.. it could mean anything to anyone and it means something to me! so thanks for that... and thanks for sharing this incredible poem... i do hope you place with this piece of art!


  • smiley
    July 10, 2006
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    you sure do know how to make a person cry with your work... this was wonderfullly done....

    Yvonne

  • Revwilliamfoos
    July 10, 2006
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    how beautiful such a lovely write this almost brought a tear to my eye and that is very difficult keep doing well
    love the papa


  • poeticweaver gold member
    July 10, 2006
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    Glad ya liked it, and thanks for reading me!

  • Animecrzed28
    July 10, 2006
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    I love this!!!


  • poeticweaver gold member
    July 10, 2006
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    Thanks so much, glad ya liked!


  • Nereida Nightshade
    July 10, 2006
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    Ummm....Wow

    Ummm.....Wow I love this poem you have such a amazing talent. Your work is wicked.


  • poeticweaver gold member
    July 10, 2006
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    Thanks Jim, I appreciate the applause and comment!

    Peace, Timothy~


  • poeticweaver gold member
    July 10, 2006
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    Thanks for your loving comment, I appreciate it!


  • Wandika gold member
    July 10, 2006
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    Very nice. Good rhythm and rhyme.

    Jim

  • windchild
    July 10, 2006
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    great

    very good, i felt the emotionin this, it flowed well, stuck together so well that it was... comforting, thick, like oatmeal, if that makes sense. It was very real. great job.
    Jesus loves you


  • poeticpieces
    July 10, 2006
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    Powerful!

    Dear Dad, You have such a deep river of emotions overflowing with love and hope, and how you weave it all in together here is amazingly perfect in my eyes...How can one spill forth anymore honesty and inspiration than yourself. I for one love all your works, but really, it does seem one out does the next, if that's even possible. Another superb piece, love ya Daddy~

    lil Timothy


  • Element14
    July 10, 2006
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    awesome

    A very great write, and the question is, do you pen bad poetry..? -Nope- ,never..lol.. Keep up the great poetry!

    Mike

  • Gwyn
    July 10, 2006
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    Nice thick poetry. The words flow together so easy at times I had to make myself really understand them and not just enjoy the sounds.


  • peaceinmind26
    July 10, 2006
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    One Of My Favs!

    Awesome! You have some skills Uncle Tim!
    This one I had to ponder upon for a bit..I like that!
    You are very gifted, and I enjoy reading you always.
    If only I had more time, I'd catch up on all your works.
    You sure can pen them out at a rapid pace, and all good too!
    Well, I'm off to the races, love yas Uncle Tim!

    Trish~


  • Grey Mouser
    July 10, 2006
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    very well done. Loved this line "Tracing liquid eyes trickling, dirty~white~tears". Bows to another master.


  • TLRufener
    July 10, 2006
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    Wow. There is a lot of high-powered deep emotion in the words you have here. This poem has a vintage classical style that amazes the eyes and the poetic soul. The image at the top adds a certain country aspect to the tone and softens the worde even more.

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