Never loose sight
Of what is right
Even if you have to fight
See the light
Use all your might
To cling to Jesus tight
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Love Him, and He will forgive.
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Thank you God, for my second chance.
I love you.
Written July 9th, 2006
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this is good.
short. to the point
good write
-BC -
I like it a lot. it's awesome
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Inspiring
awwww sis this is awesome, it is short but really awesome and inspiring. -
grrrowl
for everyone---
this was not meant as a thank you
if i was writing a thank you,
it would last day after daay!
this is juss a simple statement that came to me in church yesterday.
nothing more.
k thnx.
**luv to all**
~!~! ♥ Sammie ♥ !~!~ -
good work.
You have got your message across simply and clearly. I don't agree that this is a poem of thankfulness but clearly of just keeping what the Bible teaches you and following it even if it is difficut at times. You are making a simple statement and this is what you have done. My only suggestion would be to expand it if anything instead of being so abrupt, but either way, your message is crystal clear. -
Your concept, it is good, but there is little effort, there is little thankfulness. If I had the chance to tell Jesus face to face how happy and thankful I am, it would drag on for days, weeks, years, for all eternity. I know that a poem can not go on forever, but still, detail is needed. Again, you have a very good idea, but take that idea and put your whole self in it.
Uz redzesanos,
Bailey -
awwwwwwwww u go girl
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Wow, this is a touching, short, but yes touching piece. I really love this poem. You did a wonderful job on it!
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