Every country has it's
share of weapons
they say they're just to stop
the threat of war,
but if they're only used
as a deterrent
why does everyone
keep buying more,
we already have
the perfect weapon
it's done more damage
than the rest so far,
and killed more people
than your bombs and bullets
we know it simply
as the motor car.
Author notes
Written July 9th, 2006
serious clown
A contest entry
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Comments
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I agree, the automobile has caused countless deaths and is the weapon and the victim of our society. War weapons?... at least we could be persuaded to give them up, but to give up our cars?... no way.
A well written and thoughtful poem with a surprise ending
Dee
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thanks for your entry! I needed your username to check on the poems you have written. Sorry you missed out.
Becks -
Great social commentary, nice write, thank you for entering the contest. Good luck.
♥
whisper
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This is my first time to read this poem. I will be re-reading all the entries like I usually do.
Initial score = 8.1
Thanks for sharing and keep on writing my friend.
VIRGOAN -
Interesting. I almost feel as though more should be there about the car--either before it's revealed: like, a little less vague about it's damages caused... Or after: an elaboration on it's history of wrecks and whatnot. Thanks for sharing this and thanks for entering my contest. Best wishes. Take care.
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I appreciate this for its brutal honesty and outside-the-box thinking. I was not expecting it to end that way at all. Very fresh and original, and I’m actually quite partial to the message. Thank you for entering the contest.
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this is so true, this is something that no one rarely everthinks about. great poem. thanks for entering
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read my poems,I really do appreciate it, best wishes---Norman
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True ! True! Bravo
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This is dang true!! Such a deep and so honest message.
Jeannie
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Bravo another AWESOME piece. The truth shines brightly through your words. We are the killers of this planet and we all play a part. Thank you for sharing your talent.
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Bravo!!!! brilliant and so true......mal
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Geez G, your criticism sux! I liked this poem alot, it holds alot of truth in it. Dont listen to that idiot above, hes new
anywho, great flow and wonderful twist around.
Keep it up!
Stay sweet
Sorrow~</3 -
I LOVED IT!
that was a great twist!
It reminded me of the novel 1984, except in that book the ultimate weapon was a nuke...
you are right though...
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