White roses and dancing poses,
Of all the colours you could paint the sky
Night, crimson, and violet,
Yelling sarcasm so seriously, and
Opening you life only briefly
Underneath your beauty
I see the one who knew me
Now, it all seems so fluky.
The rainbow in a jar,
How often we used to scar
Either this or that, always off track
Like lots, love a little
Other then that, quite a pickle
The minuscule to the miserable
The miraculous to the mystical
Evening ending, Morning mending,
Regret, Reset, Replay, Rewind,
You are what I want to find…
Author notes
And we all know how hard that is...
With 10 numbers... "1 in 3,190,187,286" chance to win.
"You have about a 1 in 2,000,000 chance of being struck by lightning.
A pregnant woman has a 1 in 705,000 chance of giving birth to quadruplets.
Someone eating an oyster has a 1 in 12,000 chance of finding a pearl inside of it." -www.webmath.com/lottery.html
So I'm more likely to get stuck by lightening several times before it happens again... Thats a comforting thought.
It's a shit write.
Written July 9th, 2006
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Very interesting write, yet I could always learn something...the last pharagraph in this write really gave it the spice it needed...My fav lines,"The minuscule to the miserable
The miraculous to the mystical "
I like the twist of your words.
-a coolchick -
This is kind of sad, especially coupled with your authors comments. Whats going on, Tate?
=(
Anyway--I dont think its a shit write. I liked the ending, the last line completely made the poem. It had some nice imagery to it, with the color usage. I hope things work out for you...
~blessings~
~rora -
I have read this now about 4 times. I get a hint of where you're going with this but I am having a little trouble with the continuity.
Keep in mind though, abstact poetry is not my forté.
John
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Very interesting and makes you think, I agree some of your sentences are really great
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i think this is a interesting write, it dosnt flow very well but i think that some of your sentances are very beautiful
nice
xx
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