A Birthday had come round the corner once more,
Life was just passing him by,
He sat and looked back at old photos,
As a tear trickled down from his eye,
Life hadn't been how he'd planned it,
He'd never got wed as he should,
He hadn't the kids as he'd wished for,
Or the woman in which that he could,
Life had been good in many respects,
But he still felt empty inside,
Had never been totally happy,
A thing he always did hide,
He sat in his chair with the photos,
And the two Birthday Cards that he had,
Not much to show for all that he'd done,
In fact it was really quite sad.
Author notes
sad birthday
Written July 9th, 2006
A contest entry
- Bad birthday? by Omichi.
301 points, ended August 29, 2006, 5 entries
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thanks for entering
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aww...so sorry hun...this was so sad....but so well written I'm sorry.....I know I said that but it's sad.....and you did a wonderful job on this...keep writting
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this was a great write...your words were very powerful, emotional and strong as well..the flow to this poem was very smooth...you are a very talented author keep writting and good luck in the contest
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I'm just like him .. I know a lot of people, whom I helped .. also got only 2 birthday cards. I got no cards from friends..
I like it very much. My life isen't as planned right now, being only 14.
Great job
Thank you for entering
Good luck en keep writing
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That's so sad.I hope it wasn't your birthday you are talking about here.I hated my birthday this year. I woke up on my 30 birthday with strep-throat, I couldn't eat anything, and those nasty horse pills the dr. gave me choked me, they were really hugh.So it really sucked this year.It was the last birthday i had planned on celabrating.Anyways I really liked your sad poem. Your friend,
sad1976 (Shirley)
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so sad......great job!!!!!
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I hate my birthday it is not a day i like at all and yes it is even harder to get through when you have regrets as we all do at times a very heartfelt piece .
take-care my friend.
Tracey.
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This is sad, but realistic, birthday's can be such a bitch, even though life seems good for the most part it is when we stop to pause, to look back we think of all that we have missed an just wonder what if. But this is an excellent write, enjoyed reading it sad or not.
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kenny this is very lovely but unlike some of your oter work this is a biton the sad side.written very well makes one wonder about life in general luv ya my friend mary
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exccellent
a true write as i see things kenny just how many of us are truly happy the kind where you dont look back shed a tear or two and are happy with life or the life we have lead. Even the frustation of a poet. We all hide our tears but go with the hand we are dealt get over it and more forward. I see a line of hope in this write in life ....had been good in many aspects. Your ending is a question in my mind how sad for who the character or the reader ... great write with your touch for capturing the imagination with imagery suitable for the expressive descriptive emotion raw tugging at the heartstrings yet just enough. Brilliantly penned. Then i dont do regrets..
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simply beautiful!
A sad beautiful piece that just captivated my heart from the beginning. It's just beautiful, I don't know what else to say about it. I'm only fifteen, but sometimes I wonder if I would end up being lonely despite all the friends I had made..I guess even if I do turn out to be alone at any point in my future, just having one dear friend would make enough difference. Life does seem to pass me by all the time, never even looking at me. Anyway, I just want to say that this is the best poem I have ever read...
Right now, it feels like you opened that big part of me who hides all the time and revealed that part of me to the world. lolz. Anyway, a great piece of work. I am so glad I read this now
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this is a great write kenny,i hope to god this is not about you my friend,very sad,
well done,
alex.
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