Yesterday,
waves broke the sand dunes on the shore,
Today,
Your words like thorns pained me
but your face like a rose
soothed my mind
Tomorrow,
time ,like waves, may break my dreams
yet I dream again.
Author notes
Written July 9th, 2006
A contest entry
- Lets write a lovely!! poem for your EX bf/gf by Laura.
440 points, ended May 19, 2007, 92 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Master the short poem by Turtledove.
475 points, ended November 9, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Such a powerful read this one is. I love the word use in it it is simple but says so much Excellent write.
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Stunning!! I really loved this...
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Nice use of time
I like the positive attitude that you will live to dream again. That's a wonderful way to think about life and love. Good work. -
Well done
I don't think the title you used does an adequate job of describing what you have here....this is a marvelous write. A very solid piece of work. Thanks for entering. -
you make the pain drown in dreams...nice poem
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thanks a lot ,4 ur comments
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Excellent
This seems simple, but it has complexity in subject matter. I like poems that treat yesturday, today and tomorrow. This creates a good movement in the work. Thanks for commenting on Wind Surfing. Peace. -
*gasps* I love this poem....it is so.......powerful. I mean it is short but in the lines you used, it was amazing!
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Thank you for your comments ,the error has been corrected
as you have noted -
Very well said! Of how one person can have conflicting effects on another - You may want to go into your EDIT at the top of you page and change the broke in your second last sentence to break - other then that ...perfectly penned
Welcome to AllPoetry,
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Excellent Write
Such powerful words. You can send intense emotion in such deep rhythem. Love can be so hard sometimes.
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