This is a story about a girl who can't find happiness
Life was never amazing and she was never thrilled
She walked along dark, damp streets searching every night
For the thing that scared her most, was but a thing out of sight
She never thought the day would come when she just might...
Spread open her beautiful wings and step into the light
It was a wonderful sunny day, the day she met him
He was awkward and funny, and naturally grim
She set out to meet him, although inspiration on a whim
It was hopeful and romantic, and she incredibly showed much vim
The first time she was excited was right at this moment
This was no regular love story, but sounds cute, don't it?
She told her best friends, who were interested a bit
But she never let it get to her, she wouldn't just quit
It was odd because he showed her he cared by flirting a lot
She tried to get close but was easily distraught
What if he hated her hair and her clothes, in her head she fought
But how easily joyed, this boy to her brought!
She could tell that he liked her, it was easy to see
But the fact remained, there was no move made by he
The situation was analyzed over again, how can she be free?
She wasn't rich or poor, nor royalty, she was merely bourgeoisie
He was smart and funny, and attractive enough
This decision to make, was to say the least, very tough
She somehow managed to forget all the normal stuff
Ready to take a chance, she thought "This will be rough!"
One day she decided it was finally the time
To see what would happen, it could end up sublime
She told him, took that leap, and fortunately he was fine!
He told her he was waiting for her after all, this was divine
They were happy at last, well it took long enough, even to tell
It was hard to say, just exactly how hard that one girl fell
For this boy merely average, but in her eyes so much more, all is well
No longer her life is the bored, dark, everlasting, living hell
She found love unexpected, alas when she stopped searching
It is hard to believe the girl is me and the story is mine...
Author notes
This is actually true! It is funny how we met, but makes a cute poem...how cuter can this get?
Yeah...you know who you are...this is true isn't it?
Written July 8th, 2006
A contest entry
- Save the Best for Last... and First! by diwata.
300 points, ended August 5, 2006, 43 entries
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Very nicely done
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This is a great poem that you had penned here your rhythm flowed beautifully throughout the whole poem your use of words are superb good luck in the contest
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you did a wonderful job keep up the good work
*starfly* -
Just to add on to my previous comment, I really mean what I said before. I mean...everything was almost exactly how I would normally put it, only it sounded more...like businessy.
I know thats so not a word but it is now. I just am amazed and the people reading this...pay attention because it's more than original...its something someone could remember a long long time. When I am old I will be remembering this saying "It seems so long...like eons ago. But I remember this poem so particulary clearly."
Thanks again and sorry for taking up so much room.
~Linake -
This is a wonderful write!
Thank you for sharing this.
Best of luck to you in the contest!
Allen0826 -
Incredible
This was amazingly written...I can't believe that you wrote...wow...okay so I know you and this is incredible. I knew you were a talented writer but...I think that youi actually felt everything that you put into this piece and I have to tell you that this was amazing/incredible/pure brilliance. I think you know who will be very impressed by this piece because it is true and I loved it. Everything about it I loved. From beginning to end it was thrilling and made me feel excited and inspired. Thank you for such a talented piece.
These poems are what make people happy and what make people write poetry.
Thanks
~Linake -
Thank you for your kind words. I think that this contest was an amazing idea and I am glad you appreciated my work.. Thank you!
~Music Lover -
Thank you. I am very glad that you enjoyed it. I can't believe I wrote it actually. Thank you for the support!
~Music Lover -
Well done.. one of the most original i've seen,
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This piece was cute and I barely found it dark. There is a bit of humor, the rhyming is pretty good, and the flow was rather smooth. I am glad that you found someone that you cherish so much. Good luck in the contest and thanks for sharing!
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this is one that made me feel like I was starting to lift off the ground..An excellent write, so keep up the good work...Good luck with the contest...
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