there's a sensual magic
in the quick flash of light
that reflects between the two involved
it stays with both
a touchless tangible bond
between the strangest of strangers
only a flash of teeth and the crinkle around the eyes
a warmth lastingly retained
held truly in the recesses of the formerly black mind
now filling with mounting light
Author notes
it's still a bit scketchy, i'd love any hints on where it's weak
Written March 29th, 2003
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very good, and i don't think you need to change anything. its beautiful as is. the title caught my attention because i love to smile and a smile can easily brighten my day. a great smile is a great quality. wonderful write babe
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You don't need to change this at al!!!!! It's wonderful just the way it is. A smile.... the gesture that can light a thousand candles, soothe away the tears, bring a smile in return. There's few things in life that are so mesmerizing and can change things so much.
Beautiful write.. and thank you for reading and your kind coment on my poem, 'Mama's Trunk' It's a special poem to me.
Dee -
beautiful poem.
smiles are wonderful things...
my boyfriend doesn't smile enough, i'm always trying to get him to smile more (especially since he had dimples).
thanks for visiting my page.
blessed be. -
What a way to write about a smile, a smile from even a stranger can sometimes cheer up a person day, very well done, great write
~Broken Reflections~ -
you wrote a smile!!!!! i loved this peice. absolutly, and compleat. what a vivid, descriptiv write. it lead right to a smile as heart warming i am suer as yours is!!!
arden -
Enjoyed this, that lightning glance that engages.
You might like a piece I posted here called 'the smile' -
wee
In my opinion, it's not weak at all, this is amazing. I love it! Very truthful too, a smile just from one person when you are feeling down can help alot. Write on!
twizted bizkit
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