Two individuals
Both urning for the same respect and cherishing feeling
Deciding their fate again
over the precious telephone receiver
Trying to keep their relationship a big secret
To those who don't see the love and respect they have for one another
Trying to please those above us
Enjoying our time together.
Caressing and just never wanting to let go
of this vibe of freedom
and lust
Author notes
just another one of those love poems,....
Written July 8th, 2006
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hmmm introsting
i wander why was it a secrite
welll enver the less
i love it iam a sucker for love poems -
I like this one its great!.. Keep it up!..
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hmm. thanks for the commento n my poem... this is a good poem, as well. better than mine. great job
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Amazing
Wow this is a nice poem, short and sweet, describes a perfect couple and has alot of orginality, very nicely done -
I like the poem. Its good. I know that there's couples who sometimes try to stop other people from finding out, like their parents or whatever, but I've never really thought of the idea of `trying to please those above us`. You just made me realise that thats what they're trying to do in a way.
The last two words sound very effective on a separate line =) Great job with that.
I didnt really like the telephone receiver idea.. if you sort of made it seem more as though they were meeting up, face to face, in secret, in like a secluded/isolated place, it'd be more romantic and be following your idea more... but then again the phone is a safer way to do it. ^_^
Its certainly a different type of love poem, but a good one. Good job! =D
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