For you I have become a timeless tale,
a secret sown in love of language fair;
for you I dance on water, soar sky's pale
blue stars aglow in eyes and rays through hair.
For you I lip a kiss and tongue a word
of beauty; and become a flame ablaze
inside your soul: a need, an urge, a sword
to cut through cords that tie you to this maze.
It is a sacred gift; do heed to tread
my path of soul's soft whispered jasmine bed;
to leave a world of want outside my door
and sway with me in dance on heaven's floor.
These wanton thoughts now turn your lust to passion.
My Lord: be just in what you think my fashion.
myra
08.07.2006
Author notes
An octet followed by a brace of three rhyming couplets as the sestet.
All lines are Iambic Pentameters; with one couplet only having feminine rhymes. Thanks to Ron and Ernest for suggestions made.
Written July 8th, 2006
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- # 32 Winklers' Sonnets(& friends by approval) by Andantino.
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PERFECTION & more!
O myyyyyyy goodness graciousssssss! This is one of the most beautiful sonnets I think I have ever read! This is gold through and through. Dearest Myra, this is simply divine, darling-- tis kissed by the gods themselves.
Belle
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dear myra,
a nectar-filled poem of pure mystical delight ...
my heart rejoices in pure bliss ...
maa -
... and I truly enjoyed the masterful way in which you led me back towards the flair of structure ... I guess my poetic spirit may sometimes be quite stubborn and ask for gentle pruning. THANK YOU!
Edited on Jul 10, 3:05 because ''. -
expressive
This sonnet is in the mold of countless sonnets of love. It has a courtly style but the diction is modern English; which I prefer. A sonnet of love from a woman is as passionate as that from a man. Yet, for centuries , women played coy with words.
Myra, this poem is a beasutiful attribution to love. The structure is all you said it is. The enjambment from line three to four really catapults the reader into the sky. Your craft shows well here.
The couplets bring us to your feminity and delicacy. The final couplet shows the knowledge that your man will bring love with the physical force of his passion. He must understand your "fashion" is love and kindness.
I really enjoyed all aspects of this sonnet. Ron. 
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