As I sit in my room
In the darkness all alone
I get a feeling
A feeling not unknown
This is a feeling I'd like to call depression
And it is not my friend
When I get this feeling
My life I could just end
But I control my urge
Not cut myself
And I put that sharp razor blade
Up high upon the shelf
And I sit in my bed
And I cry and I cry
I want the tears to stop
You don't know how hard I try
People think my life is perfect
By no one knows but me
They all think my life is great
I just wish they all could see
My days are filled with fear
And my nights are filled with heartache
I know one of these days
My emotions are just gonna break
And I will grab that blade
And let my rage out
And I will cut at my thighs
Without any doubt
And the blood will drip
And it will hit the bed and floor
And the feeling I'll get
I'll want to do it even more
And then I'll get weak
And I'll fall to the ground
And I'll wish that blade was something
That I never found
I'll lay in that pool of blood
And think of all the the bad things
But having cut myself
Oh what joy it brings
Then my mom will find me
laying Lifeless on the floor
And my life will have ended
And I will no the pain no more
Author notes
Forget Regret, Or Life is Yours To Miss
Written July 7th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- Rhyme Scheme- ANY KIND OF POEM!!! by hisgirlxo.
350 points, ended July 10, 2006, 31 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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brilliant poem! well done! you definetly deserved to win, this is so good! I can realate to how you feel too, amazing peice! Well Done!
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lonely and forgotten you have done a great job on this poem. I hope that you are living life to the fullest. You have a wonderful gift, keep on using it.
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This was heart aching...it reached out to many people, as you have seen...We all feel this way sometimes, and for you to write this maturely is amazing and haunting at the same time. How are you this talented...You will do good in the contest because you are bound for greatness..this was an amazing piece that will be marked as literally scary and incredible...you have the talent to touch so many people, and you being able to write like this is chilling...I love it...
You are one of the few!
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Darling, I think that we all experience depression. I am glad that you are standing strong at the moment, but just remember to never grab hold of that razor blade. It does no good. There are people out there who love you and cannot live without you. I have been depressed and have even thought of suicide a few times. I wouldn't let myself do it though. The reason why is that I have people that love me and I love them. It is always hardest for the people you leave behind to cope. I didn't want to make life harder for anyone. It is hard being a teenager though. You have peer pressure, people that hate you and bring you down a lot, boyfriends that cheat on you, parents that expect more of you than you can give, and the media telling you that you have to wear a size one pair of jeans.
Your emotions are strong here, but I don't want them to grow so strong that you end your life. "Hold on if you feel like letting go; hold on, it gets better than you know." The rhyming and the flow of this piece were great and I hope that you were only releasing these pent up emotions in writing. I do that often. Keep up the great work and good luck in the contest!
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Good piece. It definently picked up more of a beat as it went along. Really well done. I'm in the same boat as you it would seem.
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very impressive, you have written maturely and this could relate to anyone ~ As I sit in my room
In the darkness all alone
I get a feeling
A feeling not unknown
This is a feeling I'd like to call depression
And it is not my friend
When I get this feeling
My life I could just end
this part is really appealing to most people, very good, the whole poem is very very well-expressed, this poem is intelligently done! IMPRESS A LOT OF PEOPLE ... -
OMG...did you like read my mind or something? I know that feeling all too well. On so many levels...like when people think you're life is perfect, but yet you're dying inside...and they're just too wrapped up in their own worlds to actually know how you feel...and about the crying thing...you keep crying and it's suppose to be a good outlet, but you really don't want to be crying...you'd rather be cutting. I get that all the way. Great write and keep writing.
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