I don't like you either
Why did I believe her
I am all CAPITALS when
you are on top of me
I sit around trying to lounge
myself into serenity
Shuffling in between
two perspectives of reality
The foliage tends to consume me
Where abandonment tears me to shreds
Dirty - Devastated
All I had were one word cop outs
Teetering so close
I was over the edge
The details are interchangeable
I've walked these planks
In different shoes and not
even noticed it
In every situation the same
words explain it
Evolution
The stunting of progression
is the only thing worse than
your rape.
Author notes
This is a bit about me and the powers that be.
Written July 7th, 2006
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Powerful ending. I like the linguistic references and the multiple metaphors and the kind of, sort of almost rhyme. This piece definitely seems introspective but it is also filled with astute observations - and perceptions that might well apply to a great many others.
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You are a deep thinker when it comes to your work. That's good. I don't know you personally, but you probably spend a lot of time by yourself -
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how did you know
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An interesting comparison. This poem is a bit over my head, with your intricate style that's just so much more symbolic and advanced than anything I feel I could write. Yet I get it, I hear the yelling as I read about such dirt explained in beautiful words. Your vocabulary is so rich, and you use every word so suitably...
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I can really feel the angst dripping off your pen with this. I this is one my favorite poems that I've ever read
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Nicely written, very deep and powerful. I enjoyed reading it and look forward to reading more.
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