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I'm In Love



I get out of bed
and tip toe cross the floor
stop at the door
to look at her once more
the sun shine
lights up her beautiful face
The birds are singing
God I'm in love


I'm in love, I'm in love
I can't say it any other way
She's the one, She's the one
I will ask
to wear this ring
God knows I'm a lucky man
And this lucky man's in love


Stop by the florist
and then the liquor store
A few red roses and a bottle of wine
Today is gonna be the day
I make her favorite meal
set the table
lite the candles
As she walks in the door
I see her smile
God I'm in love


I'm in love, I'm in love
I can't say it any other way
She's the one, She's the one
I will ask
to wear this ring
God knows, I'm a lucky man
And this lucky man's in love


I walk around the table
Take a knee
look up and smile
I see the glint in her eyes
I start to cry
Will you marry me
will you be my bride
Spend our life together
I see her grin
God I'm in love


I'm in love, I'm in love
I can't say it any other way
your the one, your the one
And I say yes
I'll wear your ring
God knows, I'm a lucky one
And this lucky girls, in love
God know I'm a lucky girl
And this lucky girls in love


 

Author notes

I was in the mood to write a song, though of a future day when I might ask a women to marry me.  wHAT WOULD i DO.  I dought I'd be this romantic.  But I had fun dreaming.
Written July 7th, 2006

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  • HekatesMinion
    July 13, 2006
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    This is a lovely piece and a beautiful display of true emotion. However if I may, there is a bit of an error in your spelling. "The one I will ask to WEAR this ring" Is I think what you meant, as Where is a question of location, and not a verb. Amazing piece though, Ijust thought you might want to know about the error.

  • ntimeallrevealed
    July 11, 2006
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    well done...i must concur with the comments above...really cant add much more....ahhhh i think we all wish to find such a love as this but sadly most fall short....keep dreaming...yes this is the idealic image of love and is indeed a beautifully penned poem, but alas sadly is often something we all just dream about...sorry dont mean to be a party pooper but that is just a sad fact of life...wow didnt mean to digress...again beautiful rendition of flowing romance well deserving an applaud...kudos


  • Tam
    July 10, 2006
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    Romance in rhyme

    Beautiful write! So romantic and filled with happily ever after!!! Love it. Very well done. Such a touching poem, would be a great song also. Hope this finds you safe and sound. Blessings to you. Tammy


  • mzladyt
    July 10, 2006
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    Another great write. All men should be this romantic. Don't you guys know that this is what we want? Good job


  • easily persuaded
    July 10, 2006
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    this is so sweet....I hope that when you do pop the question to the lucky lady, it goes just as you planned. Great job!


  • channelangel
    July 9, 2006
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    this is a beautiful poem, one that is filled with such love and oozes with romance! It definitely deserves to be in the Love category.
    Thank you for sharing this magical moment

  • SilentbutScreaming
    July 9, 2006
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    and every gal would love it when a man puts that much effort to the one they love and than write about it. grat job.


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    July 9, 2006
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    I'm in love, I'm in love
    I can't say it any other way
    your the one, your the one
    And I say yes
    I'll wear your ring
    God knows, I'm a lucky one
    And this lucky girls, in love
    God know I'm a lucky girl
    And this lucky girls in love

    just magicval and loveful sentiments ..here..there...and everywhere..great flow of the love indeed...


  • XxXdArCyNiCoLeXxX
    July 8, 2006
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    Aww.....this is a maginificent poem!It sounds like you guys have a really wonderful relationship.Love is such a wonderful thing isn't it?



    *DarcyNicole*

  • June-bug
    July 7, 2006
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    excellent

    she and you both will be very lucky from the sounds of it, keep dreaming!


  • Lady Dragoness
    July 7, 2006
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    This was alovely piece
    thanks for entering and Good luck
    Dragoness


  • Sandygram
    July 7, 2006
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    WONDERFUL POEM

    This was beautiful Charlie. You are quite the romantic too with your poety my friend. Such beautiful words you have chosen for that special someone when you find her. How are you? I hope all is well. You are always in my prayers each day. Been dancing lately? . You be careful, you may dance up a storm, a dust storm. Take care. Lots of smiles for you. Sandy


  • gullionmar
    July 7, 2006
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    wow what a powerful poem, very well written simply beautiful
    makes one want to be that girl ,my my how lucky she will be .keep dreaming maybe someday it will come true

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