She's falling, barely breathing, barely screaming
And if she lets go of the cliff
Would you really jump off the edge
Just to try and save a wasted life?
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Author notes
2 (3) little things you would never ever do for me..Guess I should never ever have asked 'cause now it's killing me inside
{I'll always love you, baby}
♥
Written July 7th, 2006
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Wow, there really is so much emotion in those few lines. I love this piece. It's great, original, and it makes you think.
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Wow, Their is a lot of emotion in this. Even though it's short, it's still awesome. I love short poems so this is perfect.
I feel like this a lot. Sometimes my friends joke and say jump off a cliff, so I'll ask them if they'll catch me....sometimes they say yes...lol.
But the poem was very well written. You have such an awesome talent! -
This is how I feel right at this minute, like a fall from the cliff top is inevidable, however I know mine will be there to catch me when I fall, I love this write, it is simple yet says so much, you've done a great job
Karen -
Of course I'd go jump after you sweetpea. I don't really know, but I like you so far.
Nice short poem. It was powerful with so few words. I guess you don't need to write a story to get such a strong and sharp message across. Really good, I'm glad that I found you and looked into you.
Always and Forever,
~Kendal -
Very sad piece, I hope everything's ok
Keep writing if this helps If you want to IM me- I know you don't know me but I'll listen
Best wishes
Pozo
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yeah, i know -hugs- and im glad. it's just something between me and dj. nothin big, just one of those things that really get to u. i'll probly tell u sometime when we hang out, but on the internet it's not the same
when does vince come back, anyways? well, after u guys have some alone time of course, we should have another double date. like bowling, going to the zoo, or...i dunno! but those two sound fun
hope to see ya/ talk to u sometime!!
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i'd try to save you! awwwe i liked this. very short and cute
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I like how short this is, sometimes I think a shorter poem is more powerful and meaningful than a longer one. I like the ending line the best, mentioning how the girl's life is wasted, sounds good. By the way, what's wrong? I could guess, but then again a guess isn't the same as the real thing. I didn't know you were feeling like this. You know you can always come to me if you need someone to talk to.
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is this whats rong? ....i'm really sry...maby if i wasent so fucking stuped..or maby if i lerned to be a good boyfriend for once i wouldent make you feal like this so much...i really dont see what you see in me...but i love you
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wow. that's really good. short. but good. i love it. keep up the awesome work!
sam
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