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graffitist

I mark my territory
by pissing on convention
my testament is the imagery I cast
like pearl before swine
what the fuck do they know?
my wit is apocalyptic
a prophesy of graffitist paraphernalia
for every augury perceived
I am there
in colours abundant
a swastika of biblical expressions
I am not repentant
my art is my religion!
for all to abase and worship
my canvas is the urban sprawl
of inner city desecration
my way to enlightenment
through the nozzle of an aerosol can
let my colour-coded words be your epistle
you cannot repress me
I am god of my domain
and your worst nightmare
because you bred me here
so fuck you...

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anarchy

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  • borrowing.moonlight gold member
    June 19

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    this was really interesting. i love the idea of it.. its so raw and real. i thought it was just a tad vulgar, but hey so it the world. thanks for the entry =]


  • Fibe Kill-DFW Punk-
    March 11
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    hey, this was in one of my earlier contests... it was good though so cool


  • Fibe Kill-DFW Punk-
    February 5
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    Nioce man, welcome to the finalists


  • Random Goldfish gold member
    February 4

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    This was really good. It had wonderful vocabulary and a witty play on words. It reminds me of watching all the train go by and seeing all the graffiti.

    Síochán leat
    ~Mairéad~


  • pine-needles
    May 21, 2008

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    feel like you have captured a distinct voice and attitude/outlook well, the anger at a world full of pain and violence of the city, the desire for expression and frustration to be throwing "pearls before swine," unheard. and i think the cursing and ending are part of what builds that. interesting choice of biblical imagery as an extended metaphor, an interesting juxtaposition. a spew of words, a very effective one.


  • Bionict
    April 7, 2008

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    Good Job

    This is a great dark side of a graffiti artist. I especially liked, "my canvas is the urban sprawl
    of inner city desecration". Very good use of words. Although I found the swears a little overpowering, maybe just the last line.


  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    April 6, 2008

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    Congratulations on the trophies this has won in previous contests, I am going to ask you to please put this in the 'Adult' category so no younger poets read this with it's cussing.

    A great write.
    Best of luck
    ♥
    Stay safe
    ~Manda


  • cognitivedistortion
    July 5, 2007

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    You have no idea how bad I was hoping to get something on graffiti. This really kicked ass, good luck and thanks for entering!
    and that last dude to comment's an idiot.


  • Nam
    March 28, 2007
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    "a swatstika of biblical expressions" - "swatstika" is "swastika"

    Too many metaphors, not enough literalism, especially since the piece seems to be a venture towards that particular theme. The ending isn't good, and the last line isn't needed.

    -Nam


  • JessTheRentyMess
    February 21, 2007
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    awsome

    very very good. you put so much into so little and you did it without using 5000 cuse words . (thank you for not using that many) the flow was nice. the emotion running through it was awsome as well.

    very very nice Keep Writing !!

    rent


  • Reggie D
    December 5, 2006
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    that fucking awsome man keep up the good writes


  • DeepDarkDesire
    November 30, 2006

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    Orgasmic to a poets eyes!

    I am there
    in colours abundant
    a swatstika of biblical expressions
    Those lines actually made me shiver with the intensity and meaning! This is resplendent, ostentasious and painfully in your face. I can only say one bad thing about this wonderful piece of art:
    The ending three lines (in my opinion) would sound better as two-
    Because you bred me here
    So fuck you
    However that's just down to a matter of personal opinion. I can tell you read the rules ^^


  • Odd Thomas
    September 14, 2006
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    This isnt scary. It doesnt folllow the rules


  • grannyeri gold member
    September 14, 2006
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    Oh there's some anger in these lines - can feel it way over here. The mess some leave sprayed on the sides of buildings, churches, schools is a disgrace and says much about the mentality of these people - onbe wishes that others would do the same to their things.


  • Secret keeper
    August 25, 2006
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    well i don't know...mabey if you explained some of it to me i'd understand it more...good luck in both contests,

    xx Emo


  • MadisonRae
    August 12, 2006
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    You can definetly get a feeling a power from this. Art, music, words, and other things would be my religion too if I didn't find God. Thanks for entering and best of luck!

    Madison


  • Miss Belligerence
    August 2, 2006
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    oooohhhh
    This I liked a lot. It was really in your face. I liked the vibe, it was very confident and such.
    awesome
    thanks for entering!
    -gibson


  • CokebottleEyes
    July 7, 2006
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    this is gritty there's a mood of defensiveness about it and pride. i see a 'take me or leave me' attitude...it's all very down-to-earth. an enjoyable read even if a bit scary it makes the reader think...at least this reader
    good job

  • karenina macy
    July 6, 2006
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    oh my goodness!!! i am in love with this!
    great job. i dig it.

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