the forest knew more about life than we did
trees reaching to the sky
with skeletal tendrils
bare leafed black
grasping dirt
in a death grip
the trunks of life
or death
shadowing
as we fondled believe
beneath the heart
of untold years
supple breath
whispering in leafy voices
swaying to the music of the day
or night
we knew~~~they would
bow their heads
when storms rushed in
full force winds
that made surviving pure hell
we promised to always hang on
some would perish
others would live to tell
the tiny seedlings
resting safely on the forest floor
& ours protected by the vault
crimson sweet
growing into many cells defined
grave yard for the living
the time would come
as decomposition slowly set in
fertilizing the roots of life
acorn soft born
two bodies intertwined
no sorrow lingered here
protecting one another
within circled hearts of time
surely as spring comes forth
it all must someday die
but, not today
this was our first perfect time
trembled skin ~~ sweat defined
I was his
& he was mine
a single brown leaf~~drifting
to rest on the hottest desire
shastadaisey123
Author notes
in the forest under the giant oak trees...first time, first baby 9 months later & this was my husband..but love dies and divorce comes, we had no idea~ that our love would ever die~~~
A contest entry
- Show me, don't tell... by naked roots.
400 points, ended July 18, 2006, 17 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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Applause!
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true poetry :)
Sooooooooo much wisdom here. Such poetry. I loved this piece. "the forest knew more about life than we did" -- that line hooked me instantly. I read about life as it is experienced by a tree and then descriptions of love and desire. Each line is perfect, intimate enough and vague enough. Subtle but not empty, personal but not impenetrable. The explanation behind it brings even greater light to the piece. What can I say? - I loved it. An instant classic, a true masterpiece, I tell you! Bravo, my friend!
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The story behind this poem is what sold it for me, personally. Lovely imagery and metaphor...sumptuous, sultry...and sweet.
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wow, i can smell the musk of the leaves, see the pale flesh etched against the earth, softer then a mushroom
stem buried in the silky spores, drifting in a shaded place into a spectacular heat nature provides to lovers. excellent write, many images and metaphoric feels to this poem. Thanks for your entry.~~Artis
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I especially liked the last five lines. You have such a wise voice in this poem. I love the imagery, great metaphor usage and of course I always love trees...I've been wanting to go camping or hiking sometime soon, and your poem got me thinking about that again. Thank you very much for entering my contest
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I'm deeply touched by this poem, Freda. Somehow it speaks of all life, all death. I especially felt the last stanza. It's so pertinent to all life. A beautiful and meaningful write
Good luck in the contest,
Dee
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