Born in one piece
To be shattered amiss
Again and again
The abuse repeats
One single tube
Of icky stuff
Persistence limited
Till the last sticky glob
Endurance unshaken
To last the night
Bed wet again
Eyes red shot throughout
A well trodden path
A last promise still fresh
But again and again
The path seduces
Back on the track
To be trodden upon again
All that knowledge
All that was learnt
Forgotten in a wink
An inviting smile
A familiar discomfort
Building up warmth
A shorter span than before
Back on the street
Dazed at the result
Unwilling to accept
Shattered again
For the nth time
Pieces now so small
It will take time
There’s still some glue left
Though the tube’s growing thin
This time it will hold
No more straying bold
Another pretty face
Another angelic smile
Back in the queue
Waiting familiar fate
Another fling shorter than last
Broken at the end
Even worse than the last
Shattered again now
Broken several times over
Pieces now too small
But managed to gather
Reached for the tube
The one with the glue
Never realized before
But now know it’s true
A limit is evitable
The end has been reached
No further lay roads
Only barren fields
Took for granted
This heart for too long
Now in shambles
No more glue to fasten
Author notes
Written July 6th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- Creative Title Contest by verses on flesh.
600 points, ended August 13, 2006, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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AMAZING! But too LONG! :P
THATS ALL I CAN GIVE FOR THIS LOVELY POEM!!
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Though this is a kind of long piece, I think it flows very quickly and holds the reader's interest really well. I absoutely love the first 35 or so lines. But everything after "Though the tube’s growing thin" sort of changed. It started getting an off beat rhyme and some words such as "now" were used in such close aproximation it felt sort of disruptive and took from it. I would recommend either fleshing that out a bit more smoothly like the beginning, or cutting it off entirely, because it would still be a good closing line. But I know how it can be when you have things to say and can't seem to get it all in where you want it.
Reguardless, I really enjoyed this write, and I think you did a wonderful job with your title.
Thank you so much for sharing this work with me.
jamie
Edited on Aug 03, 10:10 because 'I'm on crack'. -
The way you described pain in this poem is simply amazing! Great read!
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Great write. The picture and the words are wonderful. Good luck in the contest.
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I liked the idea of this poem. It was really good! I also liked the picture at the beginning. Good luck in the contest!
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Excellent
Excellent write..Written so well..."Good luck in the contest"
Your talent shines..
Blessings,
Betty
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