She searches all around but all she finds is darkness.
How does she find the light she seeks when her hope's been taken?
For hope and faith go hand in hand and without one there's no other.
See fear has taken her away to that horrid day.
That her life was taken from her very veins,
But in that dreaded place she finds the answer to her prayers.
Her hope was never taken but remained buried deep within her soul.
Now she's found her hope and her faith's restored.
Fear doesn't have a hold of her anymore,
And she can choose her own path to walk down in this life.
For fear is gone from her heart and she will walk free.
Author notes
i think this poem speaks about a womens ability to push through whatever she must to find the good in life. which in turn means it's a write saying good things about all women.
Written July 6th, 2006
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amazing poem
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An amazing story of faith.
I think every woman in the world can relate to this, at least in some way or another.
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Thank you very much for your entry. I love the way you relate the poem to a specific gender and enjoyed your ideas about faith and hope being hand in hand.
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its deep... hidden messages seem to be comeing from between the lines (pardon that pun)
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I thought this poem was very touching.It made me feel like all is never really lost and there's always a light at the end of the tunnel.You wrote with so much emotion and I like the way you wrote in 2nd person, it makes the feeling different.Empathy rather than sympathy, and that's where you can relate well with her.
I enjoyed this a lot.
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I found this poem a pleasant read. Great job. Only a couple things:
Line 1 has 'all' twice, and then again on the second line,
this poem could be about anyone, not just women...men have faith, hope and souls, too
you could try to be a bit more grounded,
maybe even specific... light, darkness, hope and faith, fear, life are all vague filler words, it's what you ground them to in detail that makes a breathtaking poem.
On the plus side, this is a great poem in it's own right - your path as a poet is wonderful
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Powerful and strong write. A very good description of a strong and steadfast woman. Great job with this one..
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Such a powerful write. I think you did a wonderful job. You have written a poem that is very deserving of attention.
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This has a couple of small flaws that I reccomend you fix, such as, "hope's been taken," as opposed to "hopes." "Hope's" is a contraction that can be used to represent "hope has," whereas "hopes" is just the plural of "hope" and doesn't work here. Also, "there's no other," as opposed to "theres." "There's" is a contraction of, "there is." "Theres" is not a word. Also "horrid day." should not end in a period as you are continuing the thought in the next line, and I would say, "when her life . . . " etc. as opposed to "that." "Burried" is misspelled (should be "buried,") and there are a couple more misspellings. That said, I like this poem a lot and I hope I helped you with it. - oce
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This is a very touching and empowering piece. Fear is one very powerful illusion that ensnares so many, it is very sad to see. There is hope though, as you have so wonderfully expressed. Nice job.
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Third line first stanza I here you man, I agree. How can you hope for something anything without faith in the final outcome. Error- fourth line second stanza should be remained. third line third stanza should be walk. last line, from not fone. Other then that poem was intense and made my mixed feelings (of sadness and joy) rise to the surface of understanding, beautiful ending
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Magnificent!!
Powerful piece You have penned and the Author's Comments are great for they add more sustenance to the piece
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Gives the reader additional food for the Soul to feast upon
FEAR...False Evidence Appearing Real
can certainly hinder even the Strongest if allowed...
Thank You for sharing these Words of Wisdom!!
Appreciate Your comment on my work
Best wishes to You
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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See fear has taken her away to that horrid day.
That her life was taken from her very veins,
That is my favorite part.
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Great poem!
This is a wonderful poem....the greatest lines are two and three....those lines speak so much truth.
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