Together we have so much fun,
Like a normal bunch of friends,
Only it hurts, I want more.
You had been hurt many times,
And so many changes in your life.
We helped each other through the struggles,
So I thought you cared for me more.
I know I fell too fast, but you acted
As if you did the same.
You made me want you so terribly much.
When you left, I could not breath.
I counted the days, hours, and minutes
Until we could talk again.
Tell me you missed me, I'm used to lies.
I wish I could express to you,
How much I hurt, how much I go through everyday,
Just waiting for you to give me a chance. I'm a dreamer.
Now I sit here, remembering the things you said.
Perhaps the feeling was mutual, but not so secluded to one.
Tell me. There are others more important, more charming, and
Better then me. So drop me, before I dig myself any deeper.
Together we had so much fun, but I found you had more on your mind,
Then being with me, and how we could be.
In the drama of it all this is how life is going to be:
I hear a love song, I think of you and always you.
You hear the same song, you think of her, and never me.
Author notes
Written July 6th, 2006
A contest entry
- YOUR Break Up Songs!!! by BareBeast.
300 points, ended June 29, 2007, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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wow.. awesome poem. really sad to read. the pain was obvious. well done
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This is such a caring poem!!! I don't often see such any more. Thanks for entering.
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Good poem. I liked the idea in the poem the most. The tradegic love stories where we wont someone that doesnt want use. sad but lovely.
Sidra -
Wow, this is another awesome poem! In my opinion... boys are retarded. This is a wonderful poem! I love this poem! Rock on, girl!
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This is a beautiful poem! I really liked it! I wish you could've entered this one in my contest! Maybe I'll give you some points anyway
Good job! I love this poem very VERY much!
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very sad
This is very sad. I can feel your pain in every line, and it is not right that a person lead you further into hoping that there is a future for the 2 of you. If he is thinking of someone else, I know you are hurt and frustrated. Maybe he just needs more time to get over this other person. I wish you well.
Ethereal Melody
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awesome/coolio
i kind of know how you feel I'm in love with one of my friends, but i can't put myself up to tell him. Great job.
your friend,
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thank you so much! i'm glad you liked it!! aw...that must be frustrating w/ your bf. But i'm sure all will work out!!
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WOW. his one really spoke to me. ever time i ride with my boyfriend in the car, who was also my childhood best friend and sweetheart,he always plays sad love songs, i know it is to remind him of the gurl he loved for almost wo years. i love him so much, i have almost half my life, since we were kids, but i know that he still thinks about her, even tho she didnt love him enouh to be true. I love this poem because it makes me feel like i am not alone. i like the flow and the expression of emotion painted a great imadge. great imagry and flow, word usage and emotion. thank you for sharing.
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awesome poem, great work here.
I found the form held no flow for my reading... perhaps this write would be further enhanced by the use of stanzas, as they would help in creating structure both for your flow of thought, and for the reader to easier take in and further enjoy the sentiments of this piece.
"when you left, I could not breath"
... do you mean 'breathe'??
The final two lines are a beautiful climax to a stunning poem. Again, GREAT work. Mistress Magic x -
great poem...i can definitely relate to it...
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Great poem.
So full of feeling and I can really relate to what you are going through.
"I hear a love song, I think of you and always you.
You hear the same song, you think of her, and never me."
Isn't that always how it goes?
Nice job
-KT-
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