Missing you
hearts desire...
Missing a burning fire
Needing the perfect mate
Gone is the ecstasy...
Loneliness now dwells within these walls
I try to banish the memories
Only they haunt me again
Needing something....
Wanting in the end
Where are the soft whispers?
Of love i long to hear
Lambent flame, brighten my heart
To ease my delirious mind
Where are the visions that I was given?
I only have sadness
Left behind~
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Written March 29th, 2003
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Love the line, 'missing a burning fire'..
yes....the logs remain cold
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Oh... great write, Susan. I feel the pain... I
have lived that pain. You capture it completely.
This really hit home.
Wanda -
Nice one. I think that you are a remarkable poet. Very good format on this one.
-David -
Wow...your thoughts run wild here. Lovely write!
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very sad Susan
the clock running backward, in time of regret,
Toward redemption, but not there yet,
No crueler jail could any devise,
The empty room where memory lies.
There the lace curtains, that hang to the floor,
Hung by loving hands that love here no more,
Dusty, tattered, and showing their age,
A moth eaten flag for the state of rage. -
A very deep....
saddening write
i enjoyed and the picture is lovely
thanx much for sharing
-sheshe143-
visit me soon**!!! -
Amazing
Another amazing write! I feel this one very deeply reminds me of one I wrote called "The Song". such longing, whew, took my breath away. -
So sad
These feelings leave us so empty inside but happiness soon comes back to us! Cheer up sad eyes and smile Susan, you are much prettier that way i'm sure!
~Laura -
Beautifully written; I loved this so much. I have a tendency to love all really sad ones. I don't know why; I just do; my favorite music is sad tear jerking country music. My favorite singer is Hank Williams Sr.; I think he is supposed to be the father of country music. My wife and daughter fuss at me all the time for listening to him; they like happier songs, but his always hit the spot with me. Again, I think that you did a wonderful job on this.
Damon D. Brewer -
You have a lot more than sadness, Susan; you have all of us, including ME, so you're not alone, completely. Sad, heartwrenching write, and I understand that there are places in the human heart only a loving, loyal, true mate can provide. I'm gonna try and "pray" one your way! Love you! Very much! Hope you know that deep in your heart. *Hugs* --Kel
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Sorrowful write, Sis, very nicely expressed! I love all your poems..each one unique in its own way!
Love Ya!
<3 Maureen
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You took me back to my past for a minute there.
great write with so much emotion in it.
I hope that everything gets better for you.
Yvonne
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great
wow really meaningful.i kno what you mean about the "Where are the soft whispers?
Of love i long to hear "
well i gtg for i am in school and in study skills class
~*~ Sarah ~*~ -
SO sad and full of longing. And yet, I know this feeling, one that leaves the heart aching, begging for one last moment of interaction.
Wonderfully penned!
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this is well written. i like it a lot! i can actually feel the sadness. i hope that this isn't you feeling this pain, if so, don't worry, things get better, i know that's over used...but it's true!
With Love & God Bless,
~*~*Dee*~*~ -
This is sad Susan
And it is somehow different from what you usually write
I hope you feel better soon Susan don't stay this sad forever
~~Dawn -
Awwww.. Susan, this is so sad....I hope it's not about you but if it is, hang in there.....the good stuff is yet to come.
A very emotional, touching and yes, melancholy write.
Also I lke the way you've written this, sort of a randomly rhyming, non-rhyming poem... very well done.
Hope all is well with you.
Big {{{HUGS}}}
Dee -
I love how you play with the rhyme, only using it when you want to, very sly, heehee. "brighten my heart/To ease my delirious mind" that's really good. You use the descriptive, fancy words very well, it's a style hard to master and it's one of your trademarks, I think. Some of us seed in the three-point thesaurus words to look cool but it's a part of your voice. Maybe the subject is a little sappy, but pain is pain, and walls are so confining when you're in pain, know what I mean? I think that's why they always get mentioned in a lonely poem.
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don\'t touch it
hmmmmmmmm , seems everyone is writing with a bit more melancholy it seems . The loneliness in this really tears at the heartstrings
{{{{{{{{{{{ Susan }}}}}}}}}}}} Just wondering if the current state of world affairs has us all a bit offkeel. I have been having nightmares for over a week .........take good care of yourself. This was a real touching piece of writing
love ,
Reenie
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this is different than other things i've read by you and i liked it a lot very sad though. very emotional and well written
Luv ya susan
your lil canadian sis
kayla* -
Very sad write Hon* Lost within one's lonelines
promises made.. promises broke...
left haunting the heart
Very nicely wrote; Susan
Great picture
veiled in her sorrow
felt the pain in this one
{{Wonderful}} work.. you do! Hon*
Love & Hugs to ya! Mina~` OoxXxoO
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The pain touches & finds that embrace within the shadows.
Yes this touches me!
Keep penning on!
Bill -
Lovely lovely lovely piece. Reminds me of pining (is that how its spelt?? lol) for my boyfriend when I go back home to visit Look forward to reading more!
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Oh, Susan this is a tear-jerker, beautifully written Hope everything is ok for you
Love you,
Karen
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Good
Very sad write.. but good... -
wow susan, very sad, emotional write you've done here...
me hopes this isn't true, for you
a nice hug if it is
for some day someone will
you again!
blessings
mike
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Susan... this reminds me of a piece I wrote called Murmurs of a lonely heart... it has the same disheartened sense of longing to it. It is beautiful, as all your words are... they emulate the beauty of the soul who writes them.
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Excellent
Sad one you have here Susan ... Very melancholy write for you ...
I hope everything is okay in your little village...
I can feel the pain in this ...
Take care, Hun
Sammy...
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