I never wanted, I never wanted to be born at all
and I never asked for the society in which amongst I now crawl
I tried to fly away I tried to fly into the setting sun
then I awoke from a dream that I had when I was very young
a bit of a bad one
a bit of a fowl taste
a bit of a notion
that I'm not supposed to be here in this place
I bit off a mouth full
I bid on a vacant lot
a bit of a notion
that I'm expected to give more than what I've got
I lost my fathers and I lost my mother even though she's here
I fought with my brother's and I watched as my sister's both disappeared
I tried to hide away I tried to crawl beneath that dusty rock
then I awoke from a dream that I had to find that I was in this song
a bit of a bad one
a bit of a fowl taste
a bit of a notion
that I'm not supposed to be here in this place
I bit off a mouth full
I bid on a vacant lot
a bit of a notion
that I'm expected to give more than what I've got
Author notes
Written July 5th, 2006
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This is...rather amazing to be honest. The word choice you place here is precise...exact and perhaps perfect.
Bravo
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wow Kurt this is very deep a good powerful write filled with emotion's.Also hits home strongly sounds like my family very much.Take-Care keep penning
Tracey
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wow this was very powerful, and i loved it! you did wonderfully with this. i have a few suggestions with this line (which, by the way, i loved) "I fought with my brother's and I watched as my sister's both disappeared" i think it would be better if you didn't have the " ' " so it would be "brothers.. sisters" and i think maybe if you changed it to "watched my sisters both disappear"
i dunno, thats just my opinion.
anyways i thought this was simply wonderful!
xx-Crash
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