You've worn me well,
or I -- you
immaterial substance.
I am that one lone leaf
swinging;
(I've missed the wind)
dewless, cracked
Of no importance or relevance;
inconsequential and irrelevant.
I wake with you in the mornings
peel off your nights
slip back into your neon
veins
one foot
at a time
again, to wear you well
or you -- me
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Written July 5th, 2006
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You've definately found the flow here
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It ain't about love...I don't do lovey dovey stuff very much. I'm glad you enjoyed the read, thanks for reading.
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is this love or depression or both
whatever it is i loved it
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Oh thanks so much for the wonderful compliment. I'm careful of which contests I enter.
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Thanks so much, the words just kinda bled out on page.
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Thanks so much for reading, I'm glad you enjoyed the read.
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Thanks so much for reading dear friend. I must tell you your latest piece inspired this one. It was the feeling I felt when reading yours AND I'm just kind of blue today. Missing my kids I guess
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I wake with you in the mornings
peel off your night
slip back into your neon
veins
one foot
at a time
again, to wear you well
or you -- me
It seems that the wind..landscpe..nature and your sentiments here just intermingled and words are through from it..just great work indeed...
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i like the flow... it's like water, flowing in its current and own way. great job!
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This is incredible. Very well written. Very descriptive and creative. You have expressed yourself so very well. Great job. You should find a contest for this. Thank you for sharing. Jeannie D Hunter
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The background goes so well with the poem, Dee - make me think of the bony charachter of dry autumn leaves. I like the "duality" of this poem...bittersweet and the way the line "you've worn me well" and "to wear you well - or you --me" plays with words, innuendos and emotions. Can very much relate to this poem, lol. Maybe it is a good thing that we are made of "immaterial substance"! Be good - this is a well-written piece.
~ Nicolette
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sher gut (very good)
wow, this was great work... i liked the flow and you portreyed the scene and meaning very well also...over all great write
^_^
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