If I should leave.
When angels come to take me home one morn,
to hold my hand and say " be not afraid",
with smiles serene we'll fly into the dawn;
no sound of vain lamenting will be made.
And when it’s time for you to join me here,
at heaven's gate I'll stand and wait for you
to join me in eternal bliss, my dear,
beyond existence that on earth we knew.
To live without you near would break my heart.
The love we have has lasted through the years.
We made a pact to meet right from the start;
to live our lives again together here.
Since time began we shared each life anew;
our love will last beyond the lives we knew.
Joan Benecke 7-4-2006
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Author notes
For my Husband.
Rhyming abab cdcd efef gg
I don’t intend to leave for another 20 years yet
too much living to do, but I saw the title and liked it!
and it lnspired me to write this Sonnet.
Written July 4th, 2006
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Excellent!
Joan, This is a beautifully and excellently written piece. I certainly love it. I know that it isn't a new one, but it is still one that I haven't commented on, and I want to say, "You go girl."
Your American friend,
Damon
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very powerful piece, it moved me =)
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Thankyou juanita for reading my Sonnet, I would be honoured to be added to your favourites, I see you're an Aussie too.
I'll also add you to my faves if that's OK?
Hugs Joan
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beautiful..
this is beautiful, a wonderful write to your husband, you are indeed a fantastic writer and i would love to add you to my faves if that is okay, how beautiful......thankyou so much for sharing... -
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GALD THAT YOU SHARED THIS PIECE
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this is a very beautiful and touching write. the subtle rhyming helped the flow, and i really enjoyed reading. Thanks for sharing! keep up the good work!
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this was a great write. truly amazing. i am glad that u have found ur special person to be with .. And i do hope that u have many years to come.. This piece was fantastic keep up the great writing
Krissy -
very intense and sad poem..beautiful though and makes me feel that if you should leave anytime soon and your closests should read this poem...they woul smile..and be forfulle. great!
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This is sooooooooooooo beautiful! Great write! I love the images, the flow, everything about this piece! The message that is in this too is so inspiring! Great!
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wonderful
great sonnet. i love that you chose that form. and what a messagge - nothing can break true loves bonds. that is something very rare in this world and you captured how special and strong it is. very well done. thank you so much for sharing this with us. keep up the wonderful writing. will def remember this poem and tuck it away somewhere for a re-read. thanks again. keep writing! -
Lovely Sonnet Joan, you certainly have a wonderful teacher.
And don't you dare think of leaving us for at least another twenty years.
Love Jen.
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Darling Renee,
Thank you for your lovely comment, nooo sweetie I'm not going for a long time, got too much to do yet and don't forget neither are you, but when we do, meet me at the "Heavenly Poets Cafe" that I'm building there with the help of Patric, dittysri and other departed poets.
Love Joan
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Dear Just4u, thank you for your lovely comment.
Joan
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I'm glad you don't have plans to leave here soon but when you do I will not be that far behind. This is a wonderful sonnet! YOU are really getting good at this lady.
Beautiful!
All My LOVE,
Renee
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Not only lovely...but flows flawlessly too...
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I don't intend to go until another 20 years my friend. Thank you for the comment. Much appreciated.
Joan
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A lovely poem my friend and hey you better not go for at least another twenty years or more.This was really lovely and i'm sure the person you wrote this for would feel the exact same way,right from the bottom of your heart my friend.Kenny
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I loved it.
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Thankyou Hugh for your confidence in me and the honour you haave placed on my Sonnet. I have now added it to your collection.
Love Bea
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A beautiful piece. Really captured my heart. Just goes to show that when you find your soulmate nothing can break the bond, not evening when life has passed.
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Dear Bea,
This is beautifully written. Your meter is perfect and the rhyming abab cdcd efef gg is splendid. I'm bookmarking this and hope Bob appreciates it's beauty as much as I do. He should certainly appreciate the love and the romantic expression!
Would you include this in the Wyleian collection as number CL?
(That is 150!!) I can't6 give a greater indication of my pride in you - my "star sonnet pupil!"
Applause, love and hugs, XXX Hugh.
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