The stars blotted out with artificial light
A mistaken idea that day is eminent
A never ending day
A never coming night
Never to lie down and drift off to sleep
Never to find peace with thine eyes
The stars are all but a dream,
A dream never to come
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i am visiting my family in th city
Written July 4th, 2006
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its nice i like it you should read a few of my poem
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Nice work maverick!!! I love how, with every poem you write, your poems grow in strength. You put more mystery into each line, more weight into the words, and more power into your thoughts. I like the dramatic point in the middle:
A never ending day
A never coming night
its kinda like "poem.stop.poem" i know that you know what i mean (even though most wouldnt). You need to read my works more!!!! comments are lacking on my newer poems. ok. love ya, dollface!!!! jk. jk. i miss you!!! we all do.
Edited on Oct 11, 11:21 because 'because i felt like it!! gah!!! lol.'. -
hmm what's it kinda ab? I like it but am puzzeled. How r u btw.. haven't seen you this year.. i don't think..~Ash
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i love it!...i wanted 2 keep reading but itended...cliff-hanger! lol lol but its a great write sweetie!
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Great Expression
Our little talk today gives me an idea about the substance that triggered these thoughts.... great write my friend!
KAY
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