Bitter Escape
A wounded spirit huddles down
And holds a breath in Spirit's realm
Above the flaming fires of Hell
A never ending thirst unquenched
An amputated self dismissed
Untouched, agreed, unknown to me
The long forgotten walls of pain
Made mortar turn to bitter clay
And damning brick, by damning brick
Was defense wrought through tears and fists
Her hand, my grasp, afraid perhaps....
Of questions feigned, escapes delayed
To laugh and share, the burdens bear
And follow love to gardens fair
Picture by Todd Gipstein
Author notes
This poem was inspired by severe abuse growing up. I tried to express the precious chance of leaving all that behind to open my heart to love.
Written July 3rd, 2006
A contest entry
- After Abuse by master-of-shadow.
350 points, ended November 30, 2006, 26 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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aplauses for your entry, I will send points... I just can't work out how at the moment :S
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Thanks master-of-shadow! Hope you figured out how to deal with your father and all! Thanks for the contest and for the silver!
Annette
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this one had a flow that made it hard for me to blink. I dont think I did blink. Kinda scary as I read through it. Good write
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excellent
Beautiful write. easy to follow and the emotion is intense. I like it alot. description is great. -
i liked the flow of this one as well as the meaning. good write i loved it
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i loke so much emotion thanks for entering and good luck!
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very deep, told such a haunting tale. beautiful write, keep writing it helps the pain heal! Don't let any one ever steal your dreams!
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Thanks so much waydown, I did what you suggested and I appreciate the input and comment! And your take on the poem was exactly as I intended, I too can relate to your experiences! Thanks again......
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A good read!
There was a great theme written in to this poem and one that I could ID with, having grown up in an abusive household and then further being attracted to others that would abuse me as I searched for love in all the wrong places. Great poem by you and I just want to say that you should edit this one so you repeat the title under the picture and then skip two lines and start the poem. The picture gets lost when you have to scroll down so far to read the poem! joy
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Beautifuly expressive.
I like this very much, it;s so Spiritual,so hauntingly beautiful. I reakkt like waht was said.Thanks,donboy -
Azume, if you are referring to the word "damning" - it is not swearing according to this definition:
dictionary.reference.com/search?q=damning&x=0&y=0
Bittersweet, a lovely poem, albeit a little obscure. If this is the intention, great! I guess interpretation can be made however one sees fit.
thanks for sharing - I enjoyed it -
well done
There are no swears in it. It is the nature of the words.
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This is wonderfully written and will inspire many!It flowed well and expressed so much!
(There are 2 swears in it and the rules state no swearing.Please remove them or replace them.Thanks =D)
Ciao and God bless,
~*Azume
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