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A Piece of Peace

Missing image
hope's
center crown
of golden heart
and petals pouring rays
of white

against
soft greens
of stem and leaves
peace blooms so faithful
in love's light


myra
03.07.2006

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Written July 3rd, 2006

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  • Wildequill
    July 8, 2006
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    Yes, I really liked this - crisp and clean.. pure in intent and simplicity. A worthy write in my book, as humble as that be...


  • maa gold member
    July 5, 2006
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    dearest myra,
    your poem strikes me through its simplicity and innocence. its beauty lies in the masterful art of using a minimum of words in order to create a concentrated message of wisdom and peace, using the image of a little flower and showing us the meaning of love and peace through its example in such a delicate and touching way ...
    words of truth are always simple ...
    words of peace as well ...
    not saying "look at me", but rather guiding us to "looking ..."

    a truly beautiful poem, myra
    thank you.
    (for some reasons I think of an indian lady-mystic called "mirabai", when I hear your name ...)

    maa


  • MyrddinEmrys silver member
    July 3, 2006
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    This is a beautiful "piece of peace"! I really like the form you used. The photo struck me in a similar way. And you are very right in both your versions...God IS peace, God blooms faithfully, lovingly, peacefully in all creation ( allpoetry.com/Poem/1713139 ).

    Peace, blessings and fortune in the constest, Rod


  • myrataal silver member
    July 3, 2006
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    You were too fast for me LOL I meant: God's creation glorifies Himself -- but I know it is too complex a thought for such a fragile poem, so I changed it to "peace blooms ..." But: thank you for being so aware!


    Edited on Jul 03, 3:36 p.m. because ''.


  • StarEyes
    July 3, 2006
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    This is really nice. I had daisies in my wedding bouquet, and loved it! you truly captured them here! Great write!


  • yahokay389
    July 3, 2006
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    i really liked this. It was had nice flow and structure. The picture fits really well. Just curious about the lines: God blooms so faithful in loves light." what does that mean exactly?


  • Owlfire
    July 3, 2006
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    Oh I am sorry to take your points, I saw this on the featured box and loved the title so click
    This poem is true to its title, it is a little slice of heaven :-)

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