smoke
filled pond
my thoughts rest
on a bed of...
clouds
still
under
the full moon
sleeping in dawns
light
she
lights up
like candles...
brighter then the
stars
swift
in flight
two lone birds
remind me of
us
Author notes
Written July 3rd, 2006
What did you think
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.........He
........waxes
.......poetic
...lending form to
............................love
I really enjoyed reading your work here
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deep poignant touch in ur words and feelings
i liked the way u used metaphors and described the passionate lovers in the mind -
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thank you poet for looking in...larry
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This is an awesome haiku. You did a wonderful job with this. Thank you for sharing, and I hope you had an astounding Thanksgiving celebration and may God bless you in all that you do and write my fellow poetic friend. Keep up the excellent work.
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MM, Very refreshing, I think I'll have to have a go at one of these, Impressed. Must have been good, I returned.
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There is an untoild wealth of substance here, of what you expect and from this density, the calm to slouch on reminders.
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awsome.
very well written, enjoyed this in fact thoroughly!!! Overall your words really go along great for this style of poetry, which I, myself have yet ti try, Well done and congradulations for such a great write!!!!!!!
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hello poet...thanks for looking in and a great comment...larry
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Wonderful
This is so beautiful and it lights up the night sky.Soft and alluring it gives a sense of peace.A really lovely piece.Well done, Ros
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hello ros...thanks for looking in and a great comment...larry
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thank you fallower for looking in...larry
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hello liz...THANKS...all is well...and hope the same for you and family...your poet friend...larry
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These are lovely lanturnes. I am so glad I realized you had posted something new. I hope you and the family are well. Take care my friend.
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Good Job!
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thanks ros...good too here from you....larry
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Your back.Hurrah!!!!!!!!A lovely write.A new love poem, wow!!!, Ros
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thanks ron...ALL THE WAY...larry
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well done and said.
Hey Larry,
Good to see you back to the pen once more, we all have missed you.
A very airy and light touch you have here. Written from a well-seasoned heart, to be sure. Hard to top that last allpoetry.com/Poem/1565804 one you wrote, which is my fav of all your work. This is really good in spite of breaking a few small rules. Which is nothing really to remark on, because of the quality of its flow. So glad that you have returned my airborne brother.
All the way
Ronald~
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thank you poet...larry
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good write... vivid imageries...
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I like this one dad it's like your haiku just longer. thanks for your thoughts on my poem. talk soon
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thank you anna I didn't catch that...your poet friend larry
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Larry, I am pleased to see you here again too. And how.... not one lanturne, but four magnificent pieces of poetry. Very well done. It's a joy to read them. One critical remark in the last one.... Isn't it: birds remind me ???
Anna.
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hello linda...thanks for looking in on me...larry
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very pretty ,I need to learn this..seems like a fun form, thank you for sharing..good luck..Linda
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thank you poet...happy to meet you also...thank again...larry
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Lovely!
Incredible! How have I not stumbled upon your work before?
That last verse is stunning!
I will be reading more of you. I adore haiku, senryu, cinquains and lanturnes.
Happy to meet you and your work!
Cris
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thank you dear niece...larry
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thank you dear lily...larry
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A wonderful piece dear uncle.
Glad you're back.
Wish you the best.
Shahrzad
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Ahhh, it just doesn't get any better than this.
Thanks for some of the best medicine around, my Dear Friend. I'll be back often to take my required dose. Excellent work. 
Love and Blessings,
Lily ♥ ♥
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