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Marion's Daisy

~Marion's Daisy~

With aerial presence ascribed to a queen
she soars on tranquility's palette of dreams,
most radiant, peaceful and regal of mien,
the daisy of passion in gowns of sunbeams.

While  Marion  brushes her tresses wind-chased,
she croons as a lily in  Annabelle's  vase,
perfumed as the grandeur of roses embraced,
with hands like small butterflies folding with grace.

May sweetness and calmness of artistry flow
as lids make soft shadows when long lashes close.
Swift lullabies hasten on dew-drops below
where dreams await kisses in daisy's repose!


To Maa (rose)
by Annabelle (lily)

Author notes

Any doubt that this would not be a flower write after you dangle a darling daisy over my heart!?! LOL She is a lovely symbol of peace to go along with your artistry.

Written in hendecasyllable, a-b-a-b strict rhyme but at first glance one may perceive it mono-stanza 'slant rhyming' pattern.

Bsckground by maa

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  • maa gold member
    March 10, 2008

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    I am still touched and amazed about your wonderful poetic offering to me, my dear sister ... I truly hope you are well and happy ...
    are you advancing with your flower-maiden-book-project ?

    much, much love,
    marion


  • ma belle
    July 12, 2006
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    Thank you for reading my little Daisy write. You are most thoughtful. Hugs, Belle


  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    July 11, 2006
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    excellent~

    Such a beautiful refreshing poem this is sweetie...
    And an excellent dedication as well...
    Love the background as well...
    Best of luck in the contest
    Hugs
    Susan~~~


  • ma belle
    July 9, 2006
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    Thank you, dear Suseann. I do love personified flowers. Hugs, Belle


  • suseann
    July 9, 2006
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    This write is as perfect as the daisy of freshness and peace it represents.Flawless!~~Suseann

  • ma belle
    July 9, 2006
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    Thank you, dear Mary, for kissing my words with your gentle soul. I do not believe this petal can ever wilt now!


  • M.A.King
    July 9, 2006
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    This is a gorgeous poem. Lovely imagery blending into a message of friendship and affection (which comes through gracefully.) I love the structure and the skillfully done meter/rhyme. You bend form to your subjects beautifully.

  • ma belle
    July 9, 2006
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    My dearest rose, oh how beautiful that you bestowed such generous honor upon my little flower poem .. and not just mine, but you have blessed all the contestants' poems. Wow, this was a BIG turn-out for your PEACE celebration!!!!! And such beautiful selecions. How did you ever judge this so well? Thank you again from the bottom of my lily heart. belle

  • ma belle
    July 4, 2006
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    Dear Clautje, thank you for making a visit to my little corner on AP. I am most flattered and am looking forward to reading your beautiful work. It seems you have found yourself here at home on AP. Please let me know if I can be of service to you in any way. Hugs and best wishes, Belle


  • InnerSpirit
    July 4, 2006
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    Beautiful

    Belle, this is such a beautiful, serene poem. A beautiful image painted with your words, a wonderful tribute, touching, loving and inspirational.

    love,
    Clautje


  • ma belle
    July 4, 2006
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    Maa Rose, I inhale, exhale, our perfume. May hearts bow in oneness and total surrender.

  • maa gold member
    July 4, 2006
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    sorry, ron, the lineage ends right here ...
    no children ...
    no grandchildren ...
    no great-grandchildren ... for marion ...
    annabelle's gift of a poem ...
    a poem not written for the future ...
    but for the present moment ...
    an eternal moment ...
    eternity ...

  • maa gold member
    July 4, 2006
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    dearest belle,
    hardly any words would be appropriate to express the awe your poem inspires to my soul. and you know what i usually do when this happens ... I keep silence ...
    in silent union with grace where annabelle's and marion's hearts merge with the infinite ocean of bliss ...
    there I shall always be with you ...
    be one with you ...
    be you ...
    be one ...
    be ...
    ...

  • ma belle
    July 4, 2006
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    Dearest Ron, thank you so much for bestowing honor on the Daisy of peace and passion. She is our object of love and devotion who will always dwell in Annabelle's vase (heart) and Marion's soul (her express creation--not just the work of her hands but the essence of her soul). The rose is Marion.. the lily being myself--two beings entwined in poetic grace. Yes, this is another petal collection--a legency to leave my beautiful offspring. I always have them in mind when I compose. Hugs for your beautiful critique, Belle


  • Lyndon gold member
    July 4, 2006
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    Excellence of form

    The texture of your lines is gentle and dreamy becoming your subject the Daisy and the theme of Marion reposing to dream of sweet romance. Your images, due to slow rhythmic movement; vowel assonance and the predominance of sibilant sounds enact, in union, to take us to the artists of beauty and be by their sides: Marion and Annabelle. Your verse has beautifully captured them in floral, emblematic code. I hope they keep this beautiful poem for their grandchildren's grandchildren and say Belle (Susanne) , a gold trophy poet of esteem wrote these lines for me! A poem of quiet, graceful peace....

    ~~ from Ron.
    Edited on Jul 04, 7:17 because ''.


  • ma belle
    July 3, 2006
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    Thank you, Michael, so much for visiting Marion's Daisy. My best Belle

  • Eusebius
    July 3, 2006
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    Bravo!

    Very nicely and very deftly done, with some really fine lines! Bravo!!


  • Theater Of Dreams
    July 2, 2006
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    You are welcome.

    But then what flower isn't a Miracle of Life?

  • ma belle
    July 2, 2006
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    O thank you dear Jamesy. Isn't Maa's daisy a sheer delight to gaze upon? Thank you, dear brother, for your kind words. Belle

  • Theater Of Dreams
    July 2, 2006
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    Wonderful.

    Nature...a feast for the eyes and senses beyond. Such a pretty poem, and a precious daisy- enough to brighten the day.

    Precious.
    -Big Bro!

  • ma belle
    July 2, 2006
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    Oh thank you so much, Suseann. Flowers just seem to be right up my alley .. such creatures of inspiration! Hugs, Belle


  • suseann
    July 2, 2006
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    You've penned a daisy of a write about a daisy! Perfection in theme and verse mastered well.~~Suseann

  • ma belle
    July 2, 2006
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    Oh thank you, Dennis. She did tempt me to write this I think. Best of luck with your beautiful write. Your sister


  • Haiku-bless-you silver member
    July 2, 2006
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    exquiste

    Sister Belle, Your floral bouquet of sweetly scented poetry has once again brought peace and tranquility to this place. Your poetry is exquiste as usual, I'm sure Marion will love it!
    Peace unto you dear friend, Dennis


  • ma belle
    July 2, 2006
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    Well flowers do it for most women! Thank you for your comment, Rick. My best, Belle


  • Endeavor gold member
    July 2, 2006
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    Good

    As you know, I write words to shake and break the readers heart.

    As words go for flowers, this is very nice and clever too

    Rick

  • ma belle
    July 2, 2006
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    Dear Melissa, I had so much writing this and using two poets names and favorite flowers throughout. Thank you for criquing this for me and I'm so beholden to you that you adore the 'daisy.' My blessings of peace as you read it and may her fragrance follow you, Belle
    Edited on Jul 02, 6:11 p.m. because 'spell'.


  • Molassis
    July 2, 2006
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    SO beautiful Belle... I think the Daisy is possibly my favorite flower... I mean roses are pretty and all... but the daisy is so simple and friendly... I just love them!

    You've done an outstanding job on this Belle!!! As always... your writing is fantastic... extremely well written... perfectly done.. I'm in awe of your talent dear sis!

    Love ya sis and God bless you... ~Melissa

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