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~Total Loss~

I wander through the crowded streets empty hearted,
Everyone I notice with a slight resemblance I think is you,
For a moment I think you're returning to me,
Just to wake up to the practicality I’m faced with.

My heart thumps faster when I think about you,
My throat grows tighter just to avoid more tears,
Every reminder, every memory I clutch with my life,
Because I know that is all I have left…

I try to open my eyes to see the many more fish in the sea,
But no matter what I do I end up comparing you with others,
Even though no-one will come close to replacing you,
Because I forever conclude you’re perfect for me.

I think I see you everywhere just to realise it’s my imagination,
I believe I hear your voice calling me just to figure out it’s all just in my head,
I think I feel your touch just to recognize it’s the wind,
I think, in the night, you’re by me, but it’s just an empty bed,
I want to believe you’ll love me again even if it’s only in heaven.

I stumble onwards down to the abandoned church,
Till I see where you peacefully rest,
I can almost image you lying there in the ground,
But I will never entirely believe you’re gone,
All I can do is wish hopelessly for non existent answers,
So much I wanted to say to you, but never could get the courage,
I sit by your grey, grave stone covered in beautiful flowers and notes,
I couldn’t tell you alive, but I can tell you dead just to hope you can hear me,
“But I loved you; I was never over you when you dumped me and never ever will stop loving you
because every day my love for you strengthens, every day I miss you more and more, I know you too well to forget...
...your voice...your touch...and that lifting smile”

I’ll wait for you no matter how long it takes,
Even though deep inside I know my prayers won’t be answered,
For a second I see your face in the back of my mind,
It’s just me not being able to let you go and forget.

But I’m just a victim of a broken, lonely, heart,
Because when I pull my head out of the clouds,
Back into reality to face the facts…

I

Know

Your

No

Longer

H e r e

Author notes

Nightmare....


Lost




Written July 2nd, 2006

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  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    February 22, 2007
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    Thank you for taking the time to enter this contest and the best of luck to you.


  • --Bitten-By-Love--
    July 5, 2006
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    Thanks bro! But you do know dreaming of death symbolises birth...birth of happiness? fortune? a person? something good and new....so the future is bright! I'm in a good mood today, so just thinking of the furture and not the past or present helps! hehe Anyways see you! xxxx

    Bitten


  • sans-amour
    July 5, 2006
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    I know this feeling... almost every night, I wake up with dreams that something's wrong with Loren... she told me that she had a kidney infection one day, and that night I dreamed that she died during a transplant... It's really hard to deal with... and it only gets worse, unfortunately... alas, that is what we hopeless lovers must deal with...

    On to the poem... your choice of vocabulary and format is nicely done, backing up the strong and powerful message that your words hold... this is awesome, sis

    best wishes...

    Z SK


  • Angelwatchingme
    July 4, 2006
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    Tragic poem, and expressed so lovingly and deep!!


  • Night Phoenix
    July 3, 2006
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    *gapes in amazement*

    Wow. This is extremely powerful. I'm speechless!


  • Angel 19 1986
    July 2, 2006
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    thats really expressed out well

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