True brilliance is illusive
to the eyes of a frantic society
which remains blindly fixated
on perfecting the art
of cultivating mediocrity.
For those so truly gifted
are most vulnerable
to the pressures
of a conforming society
and relentless perpetual motion
of the sweeping hands of time.
Author notes
Written July 2nd, 2006 "rubber duckies"
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Congratulations on the Emerald Cups!!
Thank you for your thought-provoking entry, and good luck in my contest!! 
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Very true!
This reminds me of a piece I wrote last night, "Busy as a Bee." Frantic society has lost sight of the goals, and act much like raspberry ants. Well done! Best of luck in the contest!
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this is a brilliant poem that you have written. I found this poem very deep & thought provoking. I am in awe of this,. speechless. this is a fantastic write. one with a message that also often goes unnoticed. excellent job on this.
thank you for entering & good luck
kat
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Excellent write so true.a brilliant piece well done
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Thank you for a great review and comments that were on point. I do appreciate it. Thanks again and take care!
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Thanks Storm, yea, if I am not careful I may actually tap into depth I never knew existed. that is both exciting and scary! Thanks again!
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It's one thing to be good, it's should be a crime to make it look so easy. Thank you for taking the time to comment in a way that is truly enlightning. Thanks again!
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Society has destroyed much within ourselves. And unfortunately, as society is a chain reaction, this means we truly destroy ourselves. A lot of thought from this write, deep and well written without being too pushy or congested. Very good dear friend. Very good.
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I don't know whether they are the most vulnerable, but I like the thought of this poem, and I'm glad to see a thinking poem concerning our society.
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I had some fun playing around with your thoughts on this one.
Eyes of society
dart without focus
down long rows
seeded with mediocrity.
A sprig of wheat can’t compete
with towering stalks of corn.
They block all the sun
so it withers in darkness
until the day when the combine
mows them all down.
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your word choice is wonderful and the full organisation of the poem made it an incredible read. only a great poem could get away with this topic and you dominated this topic! the fact that the poem is so fantastic makes the topic seem more tragic. hopefully you are making or will make your dent in society to open the doors for the inrecognized talent in the world.
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Just an obsevation of how as a society we can't see the forest for the trees. Thanks for commenting.
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I feel the world's baest talent goes unnoticed as a result of time and pressure. It's tragic when gifted people lose or never how gifted they are. Thanks for commenting!
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This is very interesting.... I like how it was written... It's like you are making the "diamonds" as "humans", and how they react to different things and how it forms them. Very interesting perspective.
Phoenyx
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luf it
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I found this piece very interesting. Gives a good insight to the thoughts of society. As least that is how I saw it.
Soulful Woman
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