The Devil gazes with pure lust
For your defenseless body and soul
Horror looking you between the eyes
Tying your limbs up with fire
He pounds evil with each thrust
Sweat mixed with tears slowly roll
But only to your own demise
He burns you to his desire
The flames scorch your precious skin
You try to yell your loudest
Yet your only response was him
Scratching you painfully, leaving a notch
Saying let the true pain begin
Fear, brought him to his proudest
As all the lights get dim
He opens his eyes to watch.............................
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Watching darkness fall across hell's land
............Watching demons rise from their tomb
It began to pour down a strange substance
.............It was unknown to commander of fire
Snow rushed down from heaven's skies
............Snow belittles the flames of pure evil
In defeat is the demon's fire of utter deceit
..........In anger the Devil screamed these words
Hell will forever contain its blazing flames
.........And, hell will definitely come back for you
Author notes
Sorry for taking so long! I actually wrote four different poems for this contest but they sucked so I didn't enter them. I decided to put two of them together and make this.
I used the forms Sonanza by Sonja and Split Acrostic by getsbetter.
Hope you all enjoyed this!!!
Team: Red
Theme: Dark
{Won gold}
Here is the link to my poem in round 3 of this contest series. allpoetry.com/poems/2106772
Written June 30th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- Teen Idol Season Two: Round Two by Tangled Angle.
300 points, ended July 1, 2006, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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This was Very Brillant and creative, very well done, thanks for sharing this piece here, and keep up the awesome poetry!!!!!
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Thank you! I didn't want to screw out my auntie's and uncle's forms. Glad to know that you think I did a good job!
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Bravo petess, you have done a great job with Sonanaza and with Split acrostic. Congratulations for gold trophy. I am so proud of you my dear niece.
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Thank you. And I chosing a different background. Glad that you enjoyed it!
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Maybe I am just good with keeping focus because I wasnt distacted by the background.. I loved it and am glad you chose it.. of course I am sure you could find one just as great that wont distract people. Wonderful, fantastic, remarkable poem.. I think this is on the top of my list. This was beyond creative and very powerful. I applaud a million times.
Amy -
Thank you sooo much for your comment! I am trying to find a new background since everyone agrees with you. lol. Good luck judging!
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LOL! I'm glad that you love this background but then I'm sad because you hate it as well. I am searching for a new one now. Best wishes with the judging!
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Everyone seems to be saying the same thing about this background. Oh well, time to look for a new one. Thank you for your comment!
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I think I might change the background. Hopefully I can find another one that is better. Thanks! Good luck hosting!
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I loved this piece! It was unique, held a lot of meaning, had some imagery, and was in two or three forms! I loved that. Well, the background was distracting, but lucky for me, I didn't catch a glimpse of the background until I was done reading the poem...my computer doesn't load backgrounds quickly.
Well, thanks for sharing, keep up the great writing, and good luck in the contest!
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I love the background, but then I absolutely hate it. It is too distracting!
lol okay good poem. good luck!
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The background, while pretty and fitting for the poem, is a bit distracting. I found the poem really interesting to read. It was definitely different from anything else I have seen so far. And that's good - unique poems tend to make good impressions. I don't really have much in the way of constructive criticism. Good luck.
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Uh, I don't really know what to say about this. The background is pretty but kind of took the focus away from the poetry. I like that you used 2 forms.
-Chase
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