Light and life, both conspired against me,
And snatched away my wee bit,
They left me,struglling ,in this open wild,
Abandoned -to rot and rust alone.
They burnt my all, my love, my only, in front of me,
And with it all the memories did blow,
My hands outstretched to protest the ill,
But all in vain, nothing helped
They stabbed my back and broke my bones,
Found myself in blood and pain,
Wrapped was I in smuck and filth,
My eyes shut tight with fear, in despair,
My hands were nailed, they scooped off my nails,
I begged for mercy and was scumed to knees,
But they, didn’t move, didn’t stop, didn’t do a thing
Once, didn’t they wavour, their decision -stern,
Said it was destined, you ought to accept,
This is life in its real sense
This is when I gave up faith
Black is now my attire and dark is what I preach,
Black is a consoler, a supporter, a healer and everything to me,
Dark is black and black is for me
My mentor then guided me
He lead my way to darkness
As darkness awaits me
‘It’ said weep my friend, Weep again
weep till ur tears dry,
im here to end all ur misery and make ur existence worthwhile
take my hand,close ur eyes and give ur pain to me..
enter my land ,where the shallowness lies
shadowed by grief ,hue and cry
Endless bloodshed and pain like needle strikes,
Pinches your heart again and again,
So my dear, “only numbness survives”
It’s a better world u see,
Content, at peace, and relieved are those,
Who r bestowed with my wings
My face all ruined
My dreams all scattered
my life topsy turvy
all beyond repair now
My eyes still swollen with rage
My heart in pieces
There’s something within
Which is prolonged hidden,
Compelling me to give onto myself,
These Cryptic thoughts from deep within
force me to go through the black hole
And as I walk towards "the dark hole",
I can feel the immense strength in me
as if
Ori of my existence is renewed,
I sense the energy as I walk through,
I am stoned, I am dark and so are you
Search within for your true self and come to me,
When u succeed,
Cause I am waiting ,
Waiting in deep darkness indeed,
darkness beckons, darkness screems.
Author notes
"CORRUPT MY SOUL"
Search within for your true self and come to me,
When u succeed,
Cause I am waiting ,
Waiting in deep darkness indeed...
darkness screams..darkness calls..
certain unforseen circumstnaces do occur in life..that tend to change everything withen u ..ur thoughts ..ur way of living..ur capacity or ability to withstand something or anything for that matter..
they make one stoned hearted,any hurt or wound seem to them superficial..
this is cause they have seen the ugly face of reality..and know the truth of life..
Written June 30th, 2006
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very dark,good flow also,thanks for the entree.
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great job!
i can feel the emotion,
best of luck,
Love,
Mouse -
A lot of emotion comes from the write and I love it...
♥always Kate -
great dark write and i loved the notes you have
this poem really spoke to me in more ways then one...good luck. -
a bit long but well wrtten. i like the theme of darkness. good write and thanks for entering
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Nice, very nice. There is a lot of emotion in this poem. It all came flooding out and drownded me! Bravo to you, for a job well done! Good job! Good luck!
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thank you for the generous appreciation.
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Very intersting choice of words. i could tell ehwta yopu were saying, and the ending was absolutely fabulous. Good job and good luck.
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Interesting free poetic stile. Each like is like a hammer bang.
Very deep personal introspection exposed and exploded with each of your line. It is little longer, but pain also could be very "long". Good choosen pictures followed by good flowing thoughts. It's much better to pour out all of your feelings, not keep them all hidden to eat your heart. Welcome to AP site with your new poetic strenght. I will read more of your poetry soon.
~Sonja~ -
Hi, I'm a friend of a friend; Eternalpoet. Who asked me to welome you to AP. I do and I want you to know that I enjoyed your poem. I liked the last line. Life can be rugged sometimes. Your descriptions of reality in some sense, is true, we all get beaten up from time to time; reminded me of Christ as He hung on the Cross, reviled of men...paying the penalty for all men.
So, welcome. HOpe you stay awhile and we can get to know each other better.
Your new friend,
Walt (Turtledove) -
thank you,it was just an attempt i will make sure to avoid using chat speak from now on as have been checked upon that en number of times now.i acknowledge your generosity of letting me know my flaws and the kind appriciation
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thank you for the best wishes. -
this is a great write, and an interesting read, leaving me captibated to the end. Unfortunately, i specified in my rules, not to have chat speak in the poem, and also to put the option number in the authors comments.
However it is a great piece, and i think my favourite lines have to be:
"My eyes still swollen with rage
My heart in pieces
There’s something within...
Which is prolonged hidden,
Compelling me to join them…"
this is a very expressive and powerful piece, well one on creating it thus. thanks for entering and good luck. X -
hey vic..thanx ya.this one just became long and longer indeed..n later when i stopped..i did realize the fact but then this is first of this sort ..that i have ever written..so i guess just gave my shot..
nice u didnt leave it half way..
thanx and happy u got the concept..did correct the whole part..
and as i said before liked the idea of the black whole ..n the idea that.. whole life has become black(dark)..too
u caught ne there..
thank you
adios -
4 Stars ****
That was erm.. long?? personally i had to force myself to write a long poem to prove my friend that i can write long too
Long writes are usualy boring. You poem, atleast all those that i have read till now have been usually quite modiocre in size. Unusually in both the case, this poem is long and definately not boring...its just that luckily i found the concept quite acceptable and the meaning quite phenomenal... the way you have represented this poem is good enough to grip the reader
one word which caught my exceptional attention was the word "WHOLE" from "black whole"...
is it a spelling mistake? cos it might be taken as black HOLE ...
if its not spelling mistake then its "black whole" as said.. in that case, are you conveying that your whole life has become black(dark) ??
please do reply and help me out with that
again, trying not to use internet/chat language in the poems might give a better outlook to the poem , i dont really have any problems with them...but many might !!
take cares and have a nice time my dear friend.. just keep it up.. your humble little friend....
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... .. - vic ( who else? )
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