Omnium gatherum
chaos
and naked urgency
Phosphorescent radiance from the love
The love that cradles me from a dizzy retardation
A parental execution in the middle of me
In the center of a great divine that wallows,
with salty sacrifice
in the hallow of something cold
Its bitter freezing.faulted but created me
And now I'm here
In the collection of the breeze
One of many lights shining
Living up and under the seven seas
A human family
Surrendering briefly to the complexity of reality
But soon it will be our time
And We will be there
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I liked this poem. Your creative choice of words enhanced the poem greatly. The poem was short, but your use of adjectives added depth to it. Good job.
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this could be taken so many ways. I am trying not to read too much into it. I like that it is ambiguous, enigmatic - not unclear, but open to various interpretations because it does work on multiple levels.
your poetry is the most fascinating that I have found on this site.
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Heavy laden with adjectives. Very descriptive
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Orgasmic.
I'm going to be an idiot and say few words. Sorry if this doesn't help you any.
I need to change my underwear, now, thanks! -
wonderful!
love it! thanks for the comment and keep up the good work!
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this was surely different.and i loved it.
"and naked urgency
Phosphorescent radiance from the love
the love that cradles me from a dizzy retardation"
those were easily my favorite lines,so descriptive,such vocabulary! oh,i love the whole thing. -
wow, I love the back ground looks like something from a dream, really really cool. ♥
kinda makes me a bit dizzy. why did you wait so long to post such a neat and awesome writting for, its rare to find something so different like this in here, glad you posted.
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Surrendering briefly to the complexity of reality
But soon it will be our time
And We will be there
That part was my favorite, but the entire poem is beautiful... -
Creatress ... I have to confess that what first drew me to read this was the Latin in the first line, but this entire poem is very, very beautiful. I love the lines "And now I'm here/ In the collection of the breeze/ One of many lights shining/ Living up and under the seven seas". You truly have a gift; please never stop sharing it with us .
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