Far from wooden landscapes
Where beauty is wont to hide,
Where nature sings of finer things
And nocturnal nymphs reside.
Far from untouched places,
Among urban nightscapes tall,
He held her hand in his
And watched the darkness fall.
Streetlights bathed their tryst
And romance like hyperions bloomed;
Through a painted town, from lace to crown,
Drifted the softest breeze, perfumed.
Their starlit waltz swayed on
Around streaming statuette;
A courtyard made a masquerade
Until the silver moon did set...
And with the stirring of the sun
That stained the yawning sky,
An embrace displayed that He and She
Had let love be their lullaby.
Author notes
Written June 30th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- Original Love by jaded mine.
400 points, ended July 12, 2006, 24 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Allpoetry Book Project: Teen Inspiration. Win $100 / $30 by Kevin.
600 points, ended April 2, 2007, 57 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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That was wonderful! very nice urban love story type of poem. I really liked the flow and sway of this. Good work!
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Such a softly lyrical piece so tender and swaying, the rhythm and rhyme are wonderful and flow well, not forced, excellent job, dear poet. Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors. Hetohke'e
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I like this piece a lot, it has a beautiful songilke quality and excellent word choice. "And THEY watched the darkness fall" perhaps? Lights "bath[ing] their tryst" -> Bathing didn't sound like a very active verb. Romance like hyperions? Hmm, sounds a bit wordy. The ending felt weak to me - what does "let love be their lullaby" mean? That they loved love, not each other? The romantic words of hte rest of the poem were so powerful, I didn't want to believe in that ending...
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Congrats on the Bronze. You really have a great poem here. Keep up the great writes. ttyl Tali
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Once again, you've amazed me. I didn't even realize you entered, and I read your poem and thought...wait a minute. I know him. ...brilliant, as always. Thanks for sharing...and showing me up again. lol. Best of luck!
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Very beautiful poem. I love the part:
And with the stirring of the sun
That stained the yawning ski,
An embrace displayed the He and She
Had let love be their lullaby.
Wonderful, beautiful, sweet. You are a great poet, to be sure. Thank you for sharing your thoughts with all of us. Keep up the great writes. Good luck in the contest. ttyl Tali
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beautiful poem, i love it
serene and heartfelt, makes my heart happy to read this. keep up the great writing
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