At times in our lives we feel deserted,
there are times when we feel bereft,
at times in our lives we feel despair,
and start to wonder what we have left.
At times in our lives we feel a hand of friendship,
many times we are touched from afar,
at times in our lives we are given salvation,
yet don't understand how Blessed we are.
At times in our lives there is pain and worry,
and so often there is fear and sorrow,
at times in our lives there's hatred and horror,
and we cannot welcome tomorrow.
At times in our lives we experience such love,
graciously we're forgiven and forgive,
at times in our lives we are thankful and gracious,
to The One who gave us the great power to live.
At times in our lives we witness terror,
unfortunately we experience war,
at times in our lives we are shown the abused,
and forget all the good times before.
At times in our lives we all pull together,
and remember that we're all family,
at times in our lives we are all peaceful,
discover just what it is to be free.
The good comes and goes so does the bad,
but the positives always outweigh,
so to you my friends I offer the Blessing,
of enjoying the wonder of each brand new day.
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Written June 29th, 2006
A contest entry
- peace by maa.
333 points, ended July 9, 2006, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Hi MargaretG, thank you for taking the time to read and comment, you understood exactly what I was saying, that each experience positive or negative is a little bit of what makes us who we are. So many people berate their negative experiences, bemoan their lot, and therefor lose out on what they can learn from these, having read your own entry, I know that you are of similar mind, and you too believe that we have to take the good with the bad the rough with the smooth, you said it far more eloquently than I. I am touched that you liked my poem, and have repaired the spelling mistake thanks I had overlooked it! Blessings to you K
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I like this poem, you have gone into great detail of the ups and downs that add up to a full life. A great number of proverbs say that we have to take the bad with the good, the bitter with the sweet, yet there is no ill wind that blows no good! In extreme youth, a mistake or betrayal seems like the end of the world, and we can suffer a great deal, until we realize that we have grown through our hardships.
I noticed that the first line of each stanza begins the same way, but I overlooked the echoes in succeeding lines - your material was so interesting. I like your rhyming too. I will just point out a spelling problem - go's/goes.
Well done, and congratulations for your honorable mention.
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Maa,
thank you so much for taking the time to read my poem and leave such a heartfelt comment. I had edited out some of the repetition prior to your reading this, the line 'At times in our lives' originally started the first three lines of each stanza, so i have managed to edit some. I totally agree with you that there are some wonderful poems by wonderful writers in this wonderful contest, the messages of hope, love and peace despite adversity are wonderful, and something we should all aspire to do, to seek out the positive in every situation. I am really pleased that my words touched you, and hope that others will find some comfort too, you seem to have really understood what it was i was trying to say, particularly the part about time being a changing entity, we do experience things, but they don't last forever. I really do appreciate and commend you taking the time to leave such a full comment, and a kind word for each entrant, you are such a sweetie. Many Blessings to you, with thanks Kayleigh 
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dearest kay,
the prayer of blessings you have offered us here, is of inestimable value, do you know that ? whoever feels the need of comfort and kindness, a bit of encouragement and consolation, a shoulder to cry on or a little warmth, will be so touched by it. I am very touched by the intention you have put inside this poem and I can feel the healing energy flowing from it, transforming tears into surrendering and pain into peace ...
I am not an expert-poet and don't wish to question the interesting observations made by our two fellow poets concerning the repetition of the phrase "in times of our lives", they are certainly right about it ...
but I actually appreciate this repetition because it constantly reminds us of the dimension of time, a law in the phenomenal world but not in the Absolute ...
and what I get from your message is : time brings with it all the pairs of opposites linked to the dualistic world happiness-grief, attachment-aversion and so on ...
finding the timeless dimension of our true self, our innermost being within our hearts means to transcend the illusion of everchanging phenomenality.
several poets in this contest have masterfully expressed this in their poems when they show us how to find peace not when trouble ceases, when war ends, when things change ... but right here and now despite the turmoil, inmidst the turmoil ...
and you are also one of them when you tell us that:
The good comes and go's so does the bad,
but the positives always outweigh,
so to you my friends I offer the Blessing,
of enjoying the wonder of each brand new day.
thank you so much,
maa
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Linda, hi sweetie, thank you for your lovely comment, and for being honest, I see what you both mean. I will be one of the many who will miss you around here, I wish you much happiness, success and everything you wish for yourself. Blessings to you love K
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Cherokee, thank you so much for reading and being honest, I take your comment on board and will see if I can omit some of the repetition without losing the flow. Best wishes to you
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This is very nice. I think it would be more memorable and effective if you didn't continue to repeat "in times of our lives" but that's just me.
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