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Denial

It can't be love, you said
It can't be love
You haven't known me long
It can't be love
We're just too young
Vows are silent
Hearts break in the dark
It can't be love, you said
We're just too blind
Life is too broad
For it to end right here
It can't be love, you said
Two people can't be so damaged
And make each other whole
Crawl into the TV screen
Because love is only in dreams
It can't be love, you said
So I won't bother to argue
I'll let you walk away
And I won't break
Because it can't be love
Unless you break, too

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Written June 29th, 2006

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  • Liquid memories
    February 9, 2007

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    Lovely and cute

    At times, we do tell ourselves, its not love or can`t be for those reasons you stated and more. Jules.


  • grannyeri gold member
    January 14, 2007

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    Certainly sentiments are well expressed in these lines - easy to read and understand what you are conveying here - love means different things to different people, so what you might think is love, is really not what your partner or spouse thinks is love. Good to get together and discuss what love is to each of you before ytou commit to a lifetime of togetherness.


  • Never Fall in Love
    December 4, 2006

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    hmm..

    interesting poem
    all im gonna say is that it can be love
    but if he wont break .. then its just one-sided
    and there is no way to force him into it
    u kind of think like me
    cuz i also said .. it cant be love, if he diesnt fall for me too

    good luck in the contest

    ~* NeveR *~

  • grannyeri gold member
    October 1, 2006
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    Such an interesting ending to this, it can't be love unless you break too. Creative, sentiments well expressed in these lines.


  • a means to an end
    August 10, 2006
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    great write.. lots of emotions and i loved the rythema ndhow you kkept saying it cant be love even if you believed it was

  • Momentaryhappiness
    July 24, 2006
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    Good write. Nobody can decide what we feel apart from us! It can be love if they dont break too. This is a good write, you get your feelings across so well.
    Good luck.
    x


  • shubs
    June 29, 2006
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    Love is a disease for which the cure itself is a malady of sorts and then your lines full of poignant feelings right till the very end create the sense of despairing and mixed euphoric feeling which is the very essence of your poem Shubs


  • Zev
    June 29, 2006
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    "Love doesn't come in a minute
    Sometimes it doesn't come at all
    I only know that when I'm in it
    It isn't silly, no it isn't silly, love isn't silly at all"

    I think I have those lyrics correct...it's from a Paul McCartney song...your piece reminded me of it. I liked your repetition of your first line...keep writing...not for me, but for you


  • Maili Knephthan gold member
    June 29, 2006
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    Nicely done poetry. Love to me is just another form of slavery. But the kind of marriage that does last is one in which each can respect the other and the silences are not silent.

    Good write.


  • Billythekid
    June 29, 2006
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    If someone doesn't know they love you soon after you get to know them a little bit, then it is just meaningless. I really like the repitition of the first line. I see from your Bio that you have found love and I wish you all the best.
    -Billy the Kid-

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