Little angel from the unknown world
came to me and gently told-
'wake up girl form the endless dream", see d world with open eyes
she held my hand n made me see , the love my people had for me.
i cried a lot, coz then realized, i was dead and had lost them all
the angel sighed and gave me a smile , said I'll let u go in a while, if you promise to be wise-"to do Ur best and always rise"
be strong and never give up
thanks to the angel, who gave me life..
she made me understand, ending ones life before destined time my child,is an inimitable crime,
it hurts them more who u leave behind
believe in urself and have faith in god,
no ones perfect after all,
the worlds beautiful and u r a part of thee
your will is everything, make it strong,
things my child,seldom go wrong
never loose hope,give another shot,
it may take long but you'll get what you want.
time is a healer and heals all wounds
my heart felt life again
but was filled wid regret,grief and shame,
I was lucky to get an angel who gave me another chance , you might not be as lucky as me
so learn from my mistakes
losing in life isnt that big a deal.
Author notes
*A thought of a girl,after committing suicide,in the TRANSIENT stage..her ordeal, regrets,and pain.In her own words...
not a recent one though..cant say it doesnt hv anything personal either ..it sure does..not in my pretext...is for those who undergo such trauma..tht they b'cum so selfish..jus thinkin or more appropriately gettin scared of the consiquences ..give up..causin the unforseen pain n misery to those who r related..
its just a thought..hope it conveys the message..
its not a traditional one.
Written June 29th, 2006
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I really wished you had used proper spelling in this piece, but that doesn't make it any less powerful. Thank you for the entry, best of luck!
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Suicide is terrible in and of itself, but when it hits among the young it seems even more terrible. As a society I think we should be asking why it happens and what we as parents and friends can do to keep it from getting that far. thanks for your entry.
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scary
Sad and touching write. Very well done.
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3 Stars ***
My friend shot himself in head two weeks back, sadly i lost him !! He was on AP, now he dwells in heaven.
Lucky you are for you got an angel in your life who saved you from taking a dreadful step, somepeople just dont wait till the angel arrives...or even if it arrives, they neglect it!
A wonderful poem here by you shilpa, i have an almost similar poem, written in rather too-short-a-way, titled "Regret", i think you might like that poem, because it all and the same concept as this poem.
I have been close to friends who are suicidal, sometimes it really hurts me when i am unable to help them...anyways.. kindly mind me not for getting personal...
take cares and have a nice time my dear friend... just keep it up... your humble little friend...
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... - vic ( who else? )
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