Broomhilda rode that flagpole like a champ
She clapped her ass for those who've passed
and She did not forget the rest
for them She used her breasts
breathe in and out
She breathed in and out
three cheers for america
in a world obsessed with blame
three cheers for america
when will we ever change
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Written June 28th, 2006
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hell yes. fuck that prostitute called america.
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wow i like alot this is really interesting adn short, i think its good,
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Zehr Danke to those of you who made me change my mind about taking this incomplete poem of the site...leaving nothing but a title.......also..point promoting is very effective....*Leah
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hahahahaha I thought it was gonna be all about patriotism and boring but apparently not. I am very glad I clicked on this. Much props for this was very creative. Will we ever change? Will anyone ever be able to answer this question?
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The central image is the mother of America, somewhere between a witch riding a broomstick and a pole dancer. That's not hard to see, surely? And its not totally negative either, but wierdly nourishing. No wonder it ends in self-questioning. -
This was an interesting way of putting forth your point of view and i agree this seems to be a bit incomplete or misses some injunctions ..barring that the idea is quite good and some semblance of flow is there too ..
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I'm not to sure what this poem is saying so please explain. But I can say that I love the way it reads. Good job.
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Not sure where u were goin but it was nice
but it does seem unfisnished
Good job though
I would appreciate it if you would read/comment some of my writes
Thanks
- Lisha Dawn
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I like it though is it about a stripper dancing on an america flagpole? if so I think it's really good. if not. i'm stupid and confused
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ummm this poem is well interesting its really good metephors and things like that its really cool i like it
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Not sure where you wer going with this one either. It seems a little disjointed, but with a little work I think it can be pulled together.
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I'm not sure I followed all of this, I'm really tired tonight and my brain isn't up to par. And yes, it does seem like it's incomplete but could very well become a pretty cool write
I'd be interested in reading it when you feel it's finished With my brain power running on the orange light tonight, I wouldn't be much help in offering suggestions. It's good so far, though
Dee
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this poem is not complete, i'm open to co-writing.....danke....*Leah
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