Did you love him? She asked
Yes I did. She replied
Did he love you? She asked
I believed he did. She replied
He had bedroom eyes. She said
Yes, a gorgeous blue. She replied
His touch was so sensual. She said
Yes, he did have a technique. She replied
Did he take you to the cabin on the lake? She asked
Yes he did. I bought the tea set. She replied
That was a beautiful set.I made the curtains. She said
The pale green ones? They were lovely. She replied
I planted the roses. She said
I planted the tulips. She replied
Do you miss him? She asked
Very much. She replied
Have you seen her? She asked
No, but I hear she is stunning. She replied
Do you think he loves her? She asked
As much as he can for the time being. She replied
More wine? She asked
Yes please. She replied
Shall we toast him? She asked
Would love to. She replied
Here's to the man that was the love of our lives.
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Written June 28th, 2006
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incredible...thought it was something else at first and the more I read ...the more intrigued I was....did you hear me and an old pal of mines conversation at one time....that was the summation of it...except some expletives.....thanks ..I can laugh now...
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I absolutely love the poem and the picture is perfect for it. well done. I can imagine you and I in this...well, to talking about the guy, but the picture and the camaraderie... and the wit.
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Yes, it is funny how often times when two women compare notes they find out how the man they both thought was so wonderful was really such a jerk - using the same sugary terms of endearments on both of them - the same pet names too. And more than likely there were women who came before and those that will come after. Still there is only one Loser. Pitiful little man.
Excellent writing!
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That was very good, i really set the scene in my head..
I read some of your other works aswell, and im reqlly impressed.
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Excellent!
This was an excellent piece, well and uniquely done. Your two line format worked exceptionally well. My compliments! -
entertaining
I had a relationship with a guy that I could toast too.... no hard feelings towards him... he just was not a man of committment... hell he is still single, but will grow old alone, sadly. This was a nice piece to remind me of him....
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So sorry I made you cry, dear friend. Im glad that in the end you bonded as sisters. Not an easy thing to do, I am sure. Oh yes he will be lonely...Thank you so much for sharing your feelings with me.
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This has made me cry,it isn't word for word but a simile of what happened to me,after an ex was unfaithful to me and I was in contact with the lady in question it transpired that he had taken her to "our special place" told her "our special love phrases" and we became friends,sisters in grief,for she was not to be blamed for being played,and we cried and laughed together and accepted we were both too trusting,sadly neither of us will trust fully again.The real loser is our blue eyed lothario who will charm til the day he dies but always be lonely as a result.
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excellent
Excellent write although I can't think of to many women who would have this conversation. Kind of reminds me of a conversion I had with my ex's girlfriend a few years back but the lines weren't so nice. It was more like she was telling me she was sorry for enterfearing in my relationship and I was telling her don't worry he's your problem now.
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very well written
This is a very different perspective. You have done a great job with the dialogue between the two women. Very unique and an enjoyble read.
Ethereal Melody 
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A very interesting take on a conversation... well done. That was intreguing to read. The toast was a nice touch. As
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Thank you...I thought it was an interesting idea
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Interesting write. I could even picture the two girls sitting and talking about their lost love. This was a very good write, and I really enjoyed reading it. Great job, keep up the good work.
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cool
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I know alot of men that would be happy to be in this situation.Very diffrent take on the situation...I like it.
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YOU HAVE PAINTED A FINE SCENE, INDEED!
It seems to me that this fellow will be toasted (IF not roasted) by many other women IF one doesn'y kill him in a jealous rage first - for you know what they say - HELL HATH NO FURY LIKE A WOMEN SCORNED! These woman were HAPPY to have had his love for as long as it lasted - and this was a wonderful poem of their sisterhood and friendship after having loved and lost without regretting it from what I read here! Anbother SOULFUL PIECE from you that I was HAPPY to see today!
Love & Peace!
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....this is great...... i can see a funny side to this.... though many would have stayed with it in a serious manner.... if i were one of them women .... gee i would have thought of going lesbian....seeing we both got on well with each other and enjoyed the same wine.... forgive me if you do not see the funny side to my comment....i could not help self.
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Thank you so much kuliraga. I know the song you are referring too. The bond that these 2 women have is loving the same man that has moved on..they are not bitter about eachother or him.
Thanks for your kind words.
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This was magical. It has a sad tone, an ending tone, and yet its resignation seems so peaceful and content. It reminded me of a Reba McIntire song, I think it was called "Does he love her?" I could be wrong, I'm awful with that kind of thing. The conversations of two once lovers of a mutual beloved is simple and yet intense and touching. This is great work!
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nicely done
Sets off my "man" alarm! It is clever and well done. I like the feeling of contentment they seem to have. But then they probably know the will be three one day.
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Oh how very wonderfully done! I love the style and the spirit it was written in! Very very well done! My hat is off to you, my friend!
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Yes that is what it is exactly. The calmness comes from the fact that he is with neither one of them and he has moved on. They unite because of the love they have for the man. I thought it an interesting concept. Soulful Woman
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that was beautiful. not many people can pull off the conversation poetry, but this was beautifully done. at present i can highly relate. many may be confused at the friendship between the two women, but the slight competitiveness is also present. the friendship is the thing that grasped me the most though, because that is how it tends to be. and the unison of the last line was wonderful. beautiful beautiful write.
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I liked this...I could see the two women talking, drinking... and remembering, good job.
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Interesting. Two women toasting a former lover I take it? I am just guessing but I am not sure. Thet seem so calm about it.
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Thank you. I thought thatyou wanted just a quote but then I was reading some of the entries and saw they were long. It inspired me to write, so nothing was lost. Thank you for the beautiful picture. Soulful Woman
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Thank you Lovely Amaranth.
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You have put so much wonderful effort into your poem and have created something unique and sincerely clever. However this contest called for a quote of one or two lines. I do thank you for a delightful read... x LB
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Lovely
That was really good. I loved it.
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