Sweet thru the valley,
Like morning dew,
Her presence bathed the land,
And welcomed the dawn,
Leaving a wispy trail of magic in her wake,
The earth reverberating with every breath,
Her spirit tracing concentric patterns in the heart,
Her gaze enthrals like a beacon,
Rendered motes in her cosmic regard,
The sun heralds another day of her reign,
Drifting breeze carrying refreshing scent,
She's come home to guide and nurture...
Author notes
Written June 28th, 2006
A contest entry
- Colorful Image Contest by FaintWhispers.
450 points, ended May 30, 2007, 24 entries
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That was beautiful.
Great job, I loved that it was short & to the point.
Thanks for entering. -
This is a very good powm and the style is absolutly amazing, my only suggestion is to center it personally I think that it would make it more visually appealing. Anyway really great job! and best of luck!
~lamia -
this is very good, i like the style and well...everything.lol keep up the wonderful poems
~sinthea~ -
Hey thanks for the praise, I appreciate it!
Kind regards
Previn -
i agree with everyone else..its a wonderful poem
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Very nice poem. And a great way to start my day! May I make one suggestion???? In line 6, "The earth reverberates with her each breath,. . ." -- how about using "every" instead of "each"? -- it might flow better. Or, even leave out the word "her" since it's understood, in addition to changing "each" to "every":
The earth reverberates with her every breath,
OR
The earth reverberates with every breath,
These are only suggestions. I liked your poem very much! -
wonderfully written.!!
i will try to memorize this one when i watch a sunrise, the imagery is beautiful and i just love the way you have described her, so majestic.......wonderful write...
Edited on Jun 28, 3:52 p.m. because 'sunset should have been sunrise'.
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