Just a teen confused as hell
Sits here waiting for death in her cell
Just wanting to be alone yet have someone
Wondering about everything she has done
About how life used to go along great
But it had been real bad, of late
Sits to think if she’s doing right
But then remembers last night
When her boyfriend told her to get out of sight
So then finally she closed the light
Her blood is running across
There is nothing, no sense of loss
This is it, she is ending it
She was dying inside anyway, bit by bit
Finally there is no pain, no more
No one to call her a whore
No one would tell her she’s a bore
No one would care about what she wore
No one would make her sore
No one would spit at her core...
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Written June 28th, 2006
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Powerful
I thought your poem was emotionally penned and very deep. I hope things are better for you now. I went through a few bad relationships that ended in flames and it never gets any easier. However, when you do meet the right one it makes all that pain slip away.
Good luck on your journey and keep putting pen to paper.
Thanks for commenting on my poem "kiss".
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thanks... your words have helped me... thank you again...
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Thanks for commenting on my poem Feelings. I've been down those road before felt that time of pain and sorrow. 2005 was the year where my perfect world just begin to shatter. I didn't take matters into my own hands though. I tried the pills but I couldn't picture myself cutting. I'm no longer suicidal that's for sure. You know those lines where people say things will get better well it actually does. Poetry is a great vent for your feelings. It helps if you talk with someone. From this poem I could tell you poured your pain into it. It is filled with so much emotion and honesty. You are a great writer, take strength from this. I am sorry you are suffering to be so creative
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well thanks and yes a similar experience is what made it so relate able...
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AWESOME!
first, id like to thank you for your comment...this is a great poem...i have been suicidal..and some what felt the same as the girl in this poem...is this from an experiance?...well thank you for sharing..it turly is a great poem...
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thanks....
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this is a really good write. great flow and great ending.
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thanks... i guess i will talk to someone...
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well expressed!
I'm sorry to read that things are so dark for you right now. I hope there's someone around you that can just be there with you and listen. Remember, you are always there for yourself. I thought your poem reflected deep personal honesty and I hope that tomorrow and each day after that will get better and better. Please don't give up. Thanks for commenting on my poems. -
well expressed!
I'm sorry to read that things are so dark for you right now. I hope there's someone around you that can just be there with you and listen. Remember, you are always there for yourself. I thought your poem reflected deep personal honesty and I hope that tomorrow and each day after that will get better and better. Please don't give up. Thanks for commenting on my poems. -
a nice write, i like how you have expressed yourself here...the ryhme is a bit forced but i liked this
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thanks!
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Nice poem, very true. I enjoyed reading it. The flow was good but like master-of-shadows said it had some hard spots, but everything else was fantastic. great job!
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thanks... i appreciate it!
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This is good, though a few of the rhymes seem a little forced which disrupts the flow somewhat, for the most part this is a very well written peice
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