Thinking about all
Those white picket fences
And a boyfriend
That she left behind
Wondering how her momma and poppa
Are feeling today
Alone in their new empty nest
Stepping out of the bus
She gives thanks to the driver
For getting her to UCLA safe
Still weary from travel
Many miles of road has gone by
Though her thoughts
Still drift back to Des Moines
Placing the suitcase on the bed
In her dorm room
Feeling like a stranger from the moon
Reluctantly she makes herself at home
And begins to unpack
Amongst all of her very best clothes
She finds a letter from home
"Dear Daughter,
We both send our love
And we're so proud of you
Taking the first step
To achieve all your dreams
Money is tight
But we'll do all that we can
To make sure you get by
If there is ever a reason
That you feel the need
Just reach into that pouch we enclosed
There's a penny for your thoughts
And a quarter to call home anytime
I'll sign off now with a kiss and a hug
Love from momma and poppa"
With tears in her eyes
She headed for the nearest phone
"Thank you so much momma
For those words of love
And I know it's not much
But its the best gift of all
Your letter and 26 cents
I promise I'll call if ever I'm lonely
Or just need to hear from a friend"
With that she headed back
To her room with a smile
Knowing that the penny for her thoughts
And the quarter for the call
Were symbols of her momma's love
Author notes
I heard a country song called "26 cents" by The Wilkinsons and it inspired this. I hope you all enjoy.
contest #3
Written June 28th, 2006
A contest entry
- The Best Inspiration by Shadow Seraphim.
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What did you think
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I really like this. I like that it goes more in depth than the song does. The song tells the story quite well, but you took it a step further and added the situation. This poem also makes me think of another country song, by Sugarland, titled "Baby Girl." Beautiful write and great job!
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This is so beautiful! This made me think of my daughters ....Such sweet sentiments...You always pen such beauty!!!
Lynda
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I Love that Song and I love this poem I cry when I hear the Song. but I haven't heard it in a long time, but I have to dig it out of my box of CDs and play it. The poem is what I was looking for in this contest. Thank you for entering it in my contest. Keep on Writing.
Spirit Dancer -
Oh my god, I love it. Its so sweet. And its a good story. Would you let me write that poem into a story and me IM it to you. I just want to write it up. Ill give it to, and wont take credit or anything. I just think it needs to be made into a story, and I would LOVE to do it! I love ya, dad.
Sarah Freeman -
It's great! I love how you managed to make this story, even though you have never been through this actual event. You are an amazing writer. It reminds me exactly of a country song! Tink
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excellent
Stunning!! OMG this is good!! Your best ever. It is so sweet and sad and nostalgic. It shows the love of a parent helping a child to take a scary new step. I am so impressed. You must enter this!! I am so proud of you, son of my heart!!
hugs and love - Mum -
oh man! that was so so beautiful! so cute! so sweet! aww i wanna hear this song now
it was really nice, like how you portrayed that she was alone, and then the letter from her mum and dad, and the symbols of their love awww i loved this! well done on such brillaince!
much admiration and love
*your neice* hehehe
Steph
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Well now a little country in the house this am morning
well done a great tale and of course one of those writes
that just leaves you feeling the feelings
Thanks for sharing
Love and Light
frozentearz -
amazing
Country song? Wow. So hey... I didn't know you listened to country. This is a great write, Uncle Panther! I love it bunches! It really deserves applause, so that's what I'm gonna do! Love ya Uncle Panther, please keep writing, I love your stuff!!!
Much love, as always,
Bubbles -
wow this was very touching. I was really drawn by the title and I like how abstract it was! Much props.
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This is absolutely wonderful my son! I was brought to tears and the thought is so loving from a mother and father to their child....I really liked the format and how it came to the point so well and so quickely too!......Dad
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Excellent work, panther. I was reading along thinking what a sweet poem this is, but it's not as deep as most of his work...and then I saw it. I realized the flashback in the poem. I don't think I've ever seen that accomplished as well as you have. It's still a sweet thought, but now I realize it's a far more complicated write than just sweet words. Awesome job, panther! Keep up the good work. Toni
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I was just about to say this sounded like country song I heard.lol.This was a real great poem.You did a great job with the words and You were careful to make it unique in your own way.Wonderful poem
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Wow! What a powerful poem. It says so much on so many levels, about the isolation of leaving home, about the scariness of a new path, and the profoundness of the simplest of gestures by those we love. The flow is great and the imagery is very vivid. I honestly think thisis one of your best yet. I can't wait to see the next one, and the one after that. Thanks for sharing and keep on writing.
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