Plastic words raping poems,
Faking identities spiting each other,
Primitive sins carved in flesh,
Unshakable ignorance beneath rough skin,
Deceitful anger poured with blindness,
Mute lips playing mime,
Empty hearts sleeping in empty pockets...
Livid portraits of a hand-made world,
All pale in front of the most inspired methaphor of my life:
You...
Author notes
To my son Luca...
Though some readers might find these word-combinations a little bit too strong,I admitt they were indeed meant to shock because I'm myself experiencing this state of mind since first seing my son and realising that from now on,someone is deppending on me(and me ALONE). Knowing the evil I had to face and accepting my mission to guide my little fellow into this world,I wake up everyday denying my loneliness and hiding my fears so that I can have the strengh to teach him how to survive. And ironicaly, I'm telling him how he must not ever deppend on someone, eventhough, fighting this battle alone, makes me feel somehow....incomplete.Hmmmm....Single parenting is not a burden but an adventure which pops up the best in you.I learned so many things about myself and I confess that the time we spend toghether is indeed like a never-ending methaphor.
Technically speaking, the whole poem can be visualized from the perspective of a single mother: at her left she sees the evil,her own life experience(first stanza) which she must face everyday yet use it as a negative example,while at her right...the smile of her son who imediately doubles her strengh as she wants to forget about her world and get lost in his fairytales yet she has to stay focused because sometimes, being lonely makes you painfuly realise that you cannot afford the luxury of not caring anymore as ther's no one else there to do that for you.Hmmm....
P.S: Now I gotta go! He's trying to wash the remote-control!
A contest entry
- Why do you want to Live? by LadyLavender.
550 points, ended February 5, 2007, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - single parenting and or pregnancys. by Pureisolation.
470 points, ended May 2, 2007, 17 entries
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1200 points, ended December 4, 2007, 8 entries
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Honorable mention
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Comments
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Loved the harsh language in this, really gave it some bite, such a contrast to the lovely ending. The world is grimy sometimes, but there are always things that make the light burn so bright that we forget to see that dirt
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You are right. The words are stark and strong, but in the context of the author's notes they are perfect for whe effect that you are striving for. Great job.
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Thanks a lot for your entry here.
I appreciate it and wish you the best
of luck with it in my contest! Keep
up the great work here!
Jeremy0826 -
thank you so very much for entering your poem and sharing your story. Your poem was really nice and it deffinitly has alot of meaning into those words that does hit so strong. anyways good luck in the contest and thank you for entering.
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This is a lovely poem you penned here, well done dear poet good luck in my contest
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Wow, this is beautiful, thought provoking and I love that its dedicated to your son. Yes I relate, my own gives me more reason to want to...Live!
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WOW... this is absolutely awesome! This was very well written very intense very imaginative well done my favourite lines were
"Primitive sins carved in flesh,
Unshakable ignorance beneath rough skin,
Deceitful anger poured with blindness,"
I don't really know why i liked these lines the most but i guess they did something to me! they touched me in a way because they seem so real! thank you for entering the contest and Gud Luck much love
~Forever Silenced~
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