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look into her eyes you'll see her tears
the pain shes been feeling for so many years
you'll know how she feels she's screaming inside
you'll see all the secrects she's had to hide


Look at her heart, its been brokin into
she can never go back to the world she once knew
it's left in pieces they lie on the floor
she knows llife wont be the same anymore


Lookat her scars she makes herself bleed
by cutting her self she hopes to be free
she know that after it just makes it worse
she's trapped in herself she cant stop this curse

when things get bad she does it again
and hopes for a time when her sadness will end
look at her life she didnt want this
look at her sitting here cutting her wrists

shes missed so many years she grew up to fast
she cant ever forget she cant change the past
look at her memories non of them good
she can't wipe them away , she wishes she could

look at her tears as they flow down her face
now she feels nothing, just stares into space
her pain is takin over, theres nothing she can do
you can see her but she cant see you.

Author notes

the option is depressing and the quote thing is i can't seem to feel inside

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  • Razor-Blade Romance
    November 12, 2007

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    Very Sad, yet meaningful.
    A very powerful yet overlooked and underappreciated.
    I love this poem.
    Well DONE


  • BrokenDawn
    November 12, 2007

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    wow this is such a powerful piece, the flow the rythem is fantastic! It spoke to me and it reminded me of how it used to be in my life. great job!
    Goodluck!
    ~dawnx♥o


  • NickelleteXninja
    May 31, 2007

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    you said brokin into

    it should be broken in two


    wow.. wonderul, amazing, powerful

    I feel as if you could see me in the past but of course i couldnt see you....
    this is an amazing write... a few obvious mistakes but amazing


  • Razor-Blade Romance
    May 31, 2007
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    Quite a sensual poem. I like the raw emotion and feelings.


  • Luciferschild
    May 14, 2007

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    it was a bit cliche but the emotion was certainly there, i enjoyed every word, thank you for entering the contest


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    May 4, 2007

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    cld you please put the option and theme or song or picture and my motto into the authors box as stated in rules...message me wen u have done this and i shall give you a comment.. many thnx


  • Whispered Secrets
    February 19, 2007

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    you'll know how she feels she's screaming inside
    you'll see all the secrets she's had to hide

    I thought that was a tad off...Maybe it's the way I was reading this poem...

    My favorite lines:

    she know that after it just makes it worse
    she's trapped in herself she cant stop this curse

    The curse part made me feel a tad shocked because depression is an illness and can be seen as a curse, like any other sickness.

    Good relation


    -Hugs x hearts-


  • TheGangstress
    June 27, 2006
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    I thought you told me you had stopped cutting. You promised me you would for two weeks. Is this when you and Destry had your short falling out? Well, as for the poem itself: The rhyming and rhythm is absolutely flawless, the words flow perfectly, it creates image and stirs up emotion. It's just perfect, and if I didn't know you, it would be. But I feel your pain from this, and I'll try as hard as I can to help things get better. About fucking time you posted something too!

  • GC for KH
    June 27, 2006
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    wow this is really good i could feel sadness and lonliness in this it is really good and i can somewhat relate to this

  • GC for KH
    June 27, 2006
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    wow this is really good i could feel sadness and lonliness in this it is really good and i can somewhat relate to this

  • Caricature
    June 27, 2006
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    very sad piece, but a good write. some spelling errors. i can really relate to this having been cutter myself for many years. i stopped, but i won't tell you to. i just wish you luck on your journey ahead, and the happiness you deserve. keep writing!

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