It seemed to hurt,
Even though I didn’t show it.
A staving ache,
Where you love was meant to be.
I thought love was unconditional.
I thought that people who loved you,
Didn't make you cry.
I thought truth would prevail,
And that you promised never to lie.
You led me though crowded streets,
And into the distant dark.
But I was never lost,
Till you walked away.
Now down into the shadowy maze,
Of broken dreams,
Of fading love,
And unforgotten regret.
I still linger,
Hanging on by a single thread,
Clinging to my last,
Non-shattered dream.
It’s of you, and me,
Finally just understanding,
Who we really are.
Author notes
Thankyou for reading my poem. Any comments welcomed.
Written June 27th, 2006
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ever lasting
It’s of you, and me,
Finally just understanding,
Who we really are.
this is a beautiful thought...ever lasting
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I still linger,
Hanging on by a single thread,
Clinging to my last,
Non-shattered dream.
I love these words. Write on, I shall come back to read more. Beautiful
tskie -
Thanks for your comment on my poem. I love this poem. Too many times have I felt this way.
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BEAUTIFUL! BEYOND BEAUTIFUL! You have captured despair, heart break, and dissappointment in this poem! You are so young, and you challenge the reader to step outside their comfort to walk with you where ever you take them! Keep writing..u r already a merit! ~ Meme
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I loved it, it was full of so much heart and thought, and I can understand completely what this is trying to say, Awesome job and keep up the awesome work.
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Beautiful
Hi
its an awsome piece.Very powerful and forces the reader to think on parallel lines.So sad and beautiful in its own ways, very easily relatable. I just loved the way you've structured it. It portrays so much of pain and the way it hurts when someone who really promised to stay by your side till the very end of his life suddenly turns into a nonchalantand leaves you alone. You always long for the moments you spent together.
Just wanna say I loved each and every word of it.Wishing you luck in your future aspirations.
Take Care
Neha -
I have very strong feelings for this poem because I can relate almost exactly. Beautiful notions - their tragedy is that they are too often true - people do lie, lovers do make you cry. Harsh facts of life
such an awesome poem. Much love for it. xxxxx
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god its good i liked the way u wrote. those last 2 stanzas
i still linger and its of you and me. thanks for commentin and applaudin my poem -
Thanks for the comment on my poem! I thought I would read some of your stuff and I really like this one! You penned exactly how I feel about love...very meaningful. Good job.
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Beautiful
I thought truth would prevail,
And that you promised never to lie.
this is an extraordinary beautiful thought...in contrast with the beautiful poem" lie to me and say you love me ...I will lie too and say I don’t care."
you know Stephen Crane...you will really like his work...this poem of yours has a Crane touch...you have a very nice apporach towords Love and Poetry...miss emily Bronte!!!
by the way...Love iz always Unconditional..if that is Love indeed
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Nice
the poem has some dark and desperate touch but the closing is very nice.Actually love is the finding of the truth and Truth, the divine one, is Nobility.I like the idea propagated in these lines.
It’s of you, and me,
Finally just understanding,
Who we really are.
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Such a deep poem. You expressed your feelings/thoughts well. I really enjoyed the ending. I can't say how it makes me feel because it just makes me think. Certain poems leave you in awe and this is one of them.
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