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Raining in my head

Raining in my head
making no since at all
wishing for some sunshine
to get a grip before I fall.
Sadness lingers in my heart
and never goes away
they say I will get over it
and make it back some day.
But I see no end to it at all
coming back from this I will never find a way.
So I stay here with this emptiness
and hope to make it through each day
while I miss you and think of you
every second of everyday.
I made such big mistakes
after you went away
I wish I had you here with me
to tell me I will be ok.
My crying will never end
and the pain of my wrongs will stay
until the day that I see you again
and we stay together for eternity.

I Love You Mom!

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Something I can't seem to get over and suppose I never will.
Written February 3rd, 2003

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  • sustaind
    August 27, 2006
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    awesome!your pain is just like my name...sustaind
    you are the most beautiful disaster!


  • moment liver
    March 11, 2006
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    loved it

    How unique. i like, it struck a cord of sadness in me. Depression, I know it well. Only too well. thinking of the depression I once had depresses me. I used to be anemic or what ever and depression came with it. My personality changed. But I was only in fifth grade then and it affected me cause I was so young. I think my depression scared me too. Talking can help a lot, but that isn't what helped me, infact I don't know what did. I am so glad, I finally have a friend though who is every aspect of a friend I never new. Remeber talking helps.
    Great write!

    moment liver


  • Empathy-eyes
    July 23, 2004
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    This is a really beautiful write. I'm not sure what else to say about it, the emotions and sadness in this piece is expressed really well within each line.

    "Raining in my head
    making no since at all
    wishing for some sunshine
    to get a grip before I fall.
    Sadness lingers in my heart
    and never goes away"

    These lines inspired me the most because I can relate to them for other reasons. Anyway, I wish you all the best, Kate


  • siqminded
    March 28, 2003
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    another great poem inspired by your mom again. i love it...this is pure emotion..which is indeed my favorite thing about poetry.

  • Stewy
    March 26, 2003
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    Death is a terrible thing and we all know about its dark grip on our hearts..i know what you feel i didnt lose a parent but i lost an uncle that was so dear to my heart..and i miss him more than anything in the world..Great emotion

    Loved it
    ~Hugs~
    Derek

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