I loved this Bitch till my heart started to ache
She fucked me up all over for God's sake
Gushing down the blood from my knees
This bitch did some number on me
She made go dilussional, she made me go insane
She made me want to kill people, she fucked up my brain
She made me lick her, When she was all over with blood
She thought it was sexy, when I am covered all over with mud
She was a freak, just like me
I wanted a kiss from her, just like Herseys
She was raw, sick minded and hot
She was the only one who liked me for me and she's everything I got
A druggie she wasn't, no she was not
She licked the blood coming from my chest after the gun she shot
She said it tasted so good,not knowing I was in pain
I had a burning sensation going inside through my brain
She didn't care about pain, she took it to the next step
She made a vodo doll of herself, and stuck a needle through the hip
She was a freak, and I loved her for it
Then one day something happened that I'll never forget
she took it to the far
Went sucidial in her car
She thought me she could impress
But I already knew she was the best
My heart ached for her for a very long time
3 months its been and no one else i could find
She was sick, but I loved it
I always knew her I wouldn't forget
So I grabbed a knife, sticked it through my heart
Made sure it was in good and then tore it apart
My blood splattered on everything
Inside my hand, while I was dying, was my proposal ring
Author notes
Written June 26th, 2006
A contest entry
- Dark, Demented, why not!?!! by wanderingstarlet.
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O.O
*mouth hangs open*
HOLY-SHIT! THIS IS FUCKIN TWISTED STUFF! This is brutal, very well written. Just, wow.....i haven't read a piece quite like this before. I really liked it, CONGRATS! KUDOS!
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Wow, this is very different and twisted. A lot of emotion and imagery in this. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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oh wow...this is an absolutly amazing poem and im extreamly sorry if its true. thankyou so much for entering my contest and best of luck!
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wow i really liked this, this was very much like what i was wanting. something twisted like that. thnx for enterting!
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this is an awsome poem. i actually think ive read it before and never commented. anyways, i love the emotion in it and it just all fit together perfectly. great poem. good luck in the contest and keep writing
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wow that was awsome... i liked it alot... you made it work and i liked it.. good luck im my contest... laters...
Loves...
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Whoa I love the ending.I could feel the pain and anger running thru your words.You've just done an amazing job on this.I really love it.Thanx for entering.And Good Luck in the contest.
God Bless
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Wow, this was raw.
Erm, thanks for entering..
The rawness and language was really good.
It got across the anger.
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