Hides
a world
of mystique
unknown secrets
adventures untold
mother nature's children
hints of creatures to behold
plants of such amazing beauty
only the purest of heart may seek
what lies beneath her veil of magic trees
Author notes
Written June 26th, 2006
A contest entry
- Let's Write Etherees Picture Competition by ShelleyA.
300 points, ended July 3, 2006, 4 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Almost Anything by piccola.
550 points, ended June 22, 38 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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this is so pretty. I'd like to see it center aligned. Is it like a rictameter, in that it takes on a beautiful shape? anyway, thank you for entering.
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Quite true piccola.
It is form poetry also. That is why it is laid out as such.
I'm glad you enjoyed it. Here is a description of the form below.
Etheree
The poetry form, Etheree, consists of 10 lines of 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7, 8, 9, 10 syllables. Etheree can
also be reversed and written 10, 9, 8, 7, 6, 5, 4, 3, 2, 1. Get creative and write an Etheree with
more than one verse, but follow suit with an inverted syllable count.
Reversed Etheree: 10, 9, 8, 7, 6, 5, 4, 3, 2, 1
Double Etheree: 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7, 8, 9, 10, 10, 9, 8, 7, 5, 4, 3, 2, 1
...Triple Etheree, Quadruple Etheree, and so on!
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Thanks pretty. It was the only background with something to do with trees. So I was kind of stuck.
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Dear BraveHeart, This is another wonderful work of yours, But I didn't apprecaite the background picture.{ Of-course you're the Boss} Thanks for your comment on my work. take care.
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Thank you Charishma! This was my first attempt at this form so I was happy. thanks for the imput and suggestion also!
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I love the imagery in your etheree. Excellent title. I particularly love the line 'mother nature's children' because I felt it acts like a pivot and binds the whole poem together beautifully. I also like the last line a lot. Excellent use of metaphor in the poem. I felt the flow could have been better.
Congratulations on the SILVER!
Charishma
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Hi fader. You're very welcome. I enjoyed it very much. Take care. Shelley
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Thank you Shelley! I'm so pleased you liked it!
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A beautiful write. Lovely imagery and flow. Lovely expression of feeling. Excellent rhythm to this piece. Excellent personification of nature. Thank you for your entry. Shelley
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Thank you gal!
I'm very happy the way this one turned out. I'm a nature lover to by the way!
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You captured the very essence of nature in this piece..loved it! So beautifully worded! Bravo on this!
BTW, i'm a nature freak - brilliant!
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Thank your very much kimberly! I'm glad you picked up on the metaphor. It means alot to me your opinion.
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I love the way this begins... giving the reader the illusion that you are speaking of one thing when in fact you are speaking of another. There is a very serene feel to this and it adds to the natural beauty of your words. I am very impressed Rob! You did a wonderful job here. Goid luck in the contest.
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Thank you Beth. You should try one they are alot of fun!
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WOW... This is an awesome poem!!! I've never written an etheree before!!! Good luck in the contest!!!!
Hugs,
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Thank you for a wonderful compliment!
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You are right. This looks perfect!!!!! I love this poem!
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Thanks for the thought cherokee! That line has to be three syllables and I revised it so I hope it works better. I really appreciate you making such an effort thank you!
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Thanks Jeannie! Its my first time trying this form so I'm learning and having fun and thats what counts.
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Thanks for an honest critique! I revised it and hope its an improvement.
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Thanks for stopping by to read it.
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Thank you very much for the wonderful compliment it is greatly appreciated!
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I agree and took your advice and revised it. Thanks for the great imput and let me know what you think if you have the time thanks.
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I really liked it.
I seems this form
is hard to do, but
you managed it very
well. I congratulate
on that.
Thank you for sharing.
I wish you the best of
luck in the contest.
Jeannie D Hunter
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yeah Ill agree, the magic kinda ruined it a little. I really enjoyed the poem otherwise so if that tells ya anything. lol. Awesome write and good luck.
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a good piece though using magic twice spoiled it a little. spill poetic ink and twist me, turn me into the wild lemony crazy shape of unfathomable love...
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Pretty good imagery but it lacked what you need most--flow. I don't particulary love the form but I can see that you put work into it and I commend that. Very nice job with this. I don't like the fact that you need to know the name in order to understand the poem. I feel that it should be encompassed in the poem but Oh well.. It was good none the less.
Keep writing!
Mech
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the title of this piece caught my eye and the poem itself lived up to its name. the reader can take great interest in a piece like this, and if you arent already being published somewhere you should consider submitting some poems somewhere. nice work
adam
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